innerbeauty555

I can relate to this really well, and apparently, I'm not alone. I agree with everyone else in that your old work was more classically poetic, and that now it's ...

Excellent use of metaphor and imagery. I really like it. It really describes the idea of giving someone your trust well. You don't need the random capitals in the middle ...

This was not so good. You need more detail. As xanthan gum said, 'tis "weird", not "wierd". This wasn't very good formatting, either. Try a new line every sentence, every ...

I liked the beginning. It was light like this poem is supposed to be, or so it seems. I agree "guy" wasn't the right word in that line, either. You ...

NOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOOO!!!!!!!!!!!! I KILLED A HOTDOGIAN!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! HOW WILL I EVER LIVE WITH MYSELF? Hilarious, Liz. Hilarious. I don't like hot dogs that much anymore, anyway. Now I see why.

Last time I checked, "coulda" wasn't a word. Try "could of". Also, "To say “You’re sorry”" doesn't need the quotes around "You're sorry" and, therefore, doesn't need the capital in ...

To be grammatically correct and have all the words spelled correctly, your poem would look like this (I know Writersdomain got some of them): My time is coming... I can't ...

I agree that the verse-chorus structure is the easiest to read, but that is my opinion. Sometimes, songs are OK when they don't have a chorus because then you don't ...

Again, you don't need the enlarged fonts at those certain points in your poem. Don't use chat abbreviations like "

This was a pretty good poem. Make sure you capitalize your I's, though. You also need an apostraphe in "sorrow's" in the last line, since you are using it in ...

Ooh, I like this. Your emotions are easy to relate to the way you present them. You don't need the big letters, though. Your poetry should be able to speak ...

You had excellent rhythm in this song. I liked it very much. I think in the first line of the fifth stanza, though, you meant "too well" instead of "to ...

I really don't know much about song critiquing, but I just wanted to say this is really good. I can relate to it 100%. I think it was well written, ...

I disagree about the last two lines rhyming. I think it is good. Sometimes, I do that, too, and it seems to fit this poem. I think it makes the ...

It was good for the most part. Watch your punctuation, though. I know it's up to you, but I would suggest using more commas at the end of your lines. ...