Ok, first off, I liked the poem. Everything doesn't have to be complex to be liked, so for me, it was good. As far as the run of the mill subject matter, everyone feels pain/rejection/whatever and many project that just like everyone else does especially when they aren't poetry heavyweights, SO being that you've gotten your feelings down on paper, the hardest part is done. To make this poem even more YOU, revise it, and use words or a point of view that brings more of that out, and you'll love it even more. We know you feel pain but something deeper will capture us more....
The only thing I'm confused about is the title.....I get it but what did they say no to
Points: 890
Reviews: 9
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