Published January 17, 2006
Katie
Verse 1
Mascara runs down my face
As I look at our picture
I feel a sense of loneliness
I miss the old you everyday
Chorus
I want you to be the friend I loved
Instead of the monster you’ve become
You use to be so sweet
Now you just fill us with fear
Verse 2
It’s been two years since the old you disappeared
I wish that I could see you now
But as the person you once where
Not the person you’ve become
Chorus
Verse 3
Am
It pains me to hear of you in such a way
Feeling so much anger and pain
I wish I could help you but I cant
Though I’ve tried many a time.
Chorus
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it's really good, well structured and i love how you dildn't make it rhyme ( poeple think it's a crime to not make it rhyme). But I have a heard time imaginig what genre of music the song would fit into.. So overall, that's all I have say, really good!!
I really don't know much about song critiquing, but I just wanted to say this is really good. I can relate to it 100%. I think it was well written, and you got the point across well. Keep writing!
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