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Young Writers Society



Katie

by Tazy


Katie

Verse 1

Mascara runs down my face
As I look at our picture
I feel a sense of loneliness
I miss the old you everyday

Chorus

I want you to be the friend I loved
Instead of the monster you’ve become
You use to be so sweet
Now you just fill us with fear

Verse 2

It’s been two years since the old you disappeared
I wish that I could see you now
But as the person you once where
Not the person you’ve become

Chorus

Verse 3

Am
It pains me to hear of you in such a way
Feeling so much anger and pain
I wish I could help you but I cant
Though I’ve tried many a time.

Chorus


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Sun Jan 29, 2006 9:35 pm
FaLlEn_AnGeL_13 wrote a review...



it's really good, well structured and i love how you dildn't make it rhyme ( poeple think it's a crime to not make it rhyme). But I have a heard time imaginig what genre of music the song would fit into.. So overall, that's all I have say, really good!!




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Fri Jan 27, 2006 10:12 pm
innerbeauty555 wrote a review...



I really don't know much about song critiquing, but I just wanted to say this is really good. I can relate to it 100%. I think it was well written, and you got the point across well. Keep writing! :)

-*-*--Diana--*-*-





When your heart gets pierced with arrows, don't rip them out and pierce those around you in retribution for your hurt. You'll only unnecessarily wound others and bleed to death yourself.
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