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You should definitely continue this! I think that for a beginning of a story, this is pretty strong. I like how you let snippets of the narrator's personality come through, ...

I think this story could be a lot better. You used a fairly average premise and executed it fairly averagely. There are a lot of ways you could have revved ...

This was incredibly good, especially the writing. When I first started reading I was afraid I wouldn't be able to find anything that needs to be improved upon. You started ...

I think this could be better. It has a lot of potential, but some of the emotions fell flat. I think it wasn't as powerful as it could have been ...

This was a very emotional story in the best possible way. Your use of repetition "I remember" really helps the emotions along. I saw a few grammatical errors and some ...

I really liked this. I think it was done incredibly well. However, I did find a few things that puzzled me. Two things to be exact. 1) There was some ...

I didn't find many issues with the story at all. There were some unnecessary words and phrases throughout the piece an example being at the beginning you wrote, "Children flocked ...

The biggest grammatical error was the fact that you didn't start a new paragraph every time someone else started talking. It's really important that you do that because it makes ...

Grammatically, I saw a few errors. It's and its and a few unnecessary commas. I think you got the feelings of an imaginary friend who has to leave spot on. ...

Sapphire found herself in a small dark room. She blinked a few times to get her eyes to focus, and her first thought was she was in a movie theater. ...