hekategirl

Hmmm...don't know what to think of this, it didn't seem very unique, but it was a good poem.

For some strange reason I can really, really relate. And I unterstand it, I don't think its confusing. I like the first line the most, I though it descirbed very ...

I like it, but like Ieatworms said it was a bit to wordy, but really good for a first poem!

Cute. And sweet, I reminded me of Shel Silverstien poems, with the rhyming ending. I also like 'b r o k e n' being spaced like that, very original.

YES!!! that was the other thing, pick a tense!!!!!! it was bugging me so much!!! and also the thing about the Dad, I don't know why I forgot those....

I think you made that point already haven't you Brad?

Even though your 6 years older then me I have to agree that I like the newer ones (Oder of the Phenoix, Half Blood Prince) because their getting more adult ...

My mom won't let me read 'Go Ask Alice' she says its do old for me *GRRRRR* But it looks so cool! I can't wait to read it when i'm ...

Wha??? like Rei said, what exactly is this sopposed to mean?

I have to agree with everything Snoink said, but this sounds like a good beginning to a story. The description was very good. Can't wait to read more.

I love this poem, the ending was good and funny. The title, I thought, fit the sarcastic style of the pome fantasticly. I love this, no critque.

Yeah, this is my first story in a while so I think I used 'blobs' in kind of a metaphor poem sense, so i'll have to work that out. Thanks!

About the "cat-scrathed" v "snake skin" debate; WHY WRITE SOMETHING IF IT DOESN"T MAKE SENSE TO YOU? NEVER WRITE SOMETHING BECAUSE YOU THINK IT SOUNDS COOL. Poetry communicates. It shouldn't ...

The ending was....different...I'm not sure what exactly its sopposed to mean, but the first two stanzas were good. Maybe expand the poem so it explains more?

I like this, defintly not your greatest but good. I like the second stanza, it gives a good image and also is a good metaphor. Nice job.