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I like this the beginning of this but the ending was bad. You start off telling us about the history and what not and then you get into the action. ...

I like this, but it didn't seem to really say anything. And the line breaks, like niteowl said, were atrocious. And breaking it up into stanzas would make it much ...

I really like this, I unterstood it too. You had very good imagry in here. I like "follow the yellow brick road so-coloured from late night urinating" Heee :P The ...

I agree with Brad when he says you had good imagry but they fell into cliche. But I do like this poem. Work on the flow though, this seemed very ...

*shivers* very spooky. This is very good, very descriptive. I could see everything you were saying...which was why it was so spooky. I like to lucid dream (like I know ...

I like Amaia but it seems to bright and cheerful. I kind of have a, not dark sense of the girl, but not a bright and cheerful sense of her. ...

I don't want to seem mean but this was pretty bad. For one thing it was a very confusing read, you intruduce so many things in that little prolouge that ...

I love this Misty, the Introduction is very spooky, though I think it should be a prolouge insted. [qoute="Misty Lynn"]Those who turned twenty were given a partner of the opposite ...

This is so good!!!!! I can't give it any brutal critisisum! the only thing I would say is what Reichieru said, give us more information about the sorrundings. But one ...

I'm not breaking a law or anything commenting on this am I? anyway I thought this was more of a poem, but I guess you could turn it into lyrics, ...

I really like this! I don't agree with Writersdomain when she says it didn't touch her. It was very good, but the flow is a little off. It would make ...

This is amazing, I love it. You are such a good writer!!! I envy you! Just one thing: "Cute phrases are not enough syllables can no longer describe you because ...

i loved this. some parts didn't flow for me but this is just a stupid criticism that i am putting because i am very tired and i feel like being ...

I'm my ohpinion this is better then 'I have lost my ability to write' it wasn't long enough to really unterstand what you were talking about for some reason that ...

I love it!!! as always. But thier were a few type-o's here and there: " “I went to feed the ducks at Gregon’s pond,” I said automatically. Gregon was a ...