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Since you mentioned it, my go to number one tip for improving flow, or just improving any kind of writing in general, is to read it out loud. That way ...

I really like this and I like a lot of the things you talk about in this. Often what you describe are things that we tend to not noticed or ...

i took this as a really strong poem with a lot of emotion behind it. There are a lot of opinions laced through this that I don't necessarily agree with ...

At first I was a bit hesitant to read this because roses in poetry are done to death. But I can happily say that this wasn't a total cliche, which ...

The rhyming structure dropped in stanza 4 then picked back up again in stanza 5. Also, for stanza 1, 2 and 4 you had a cool thing where line 2 ...

Just reading through this and a simple thing you could do to make this story stronger is find a way to get find of the time lapses. You have quite ...

First of all, you should always have chapters as separate works that way you will get more reviews and the piece will look less intimidating for the reader to read ...

CAN I JUST USE CAPS FOR A SECOND LIKE I'M SORRY BUT THIS POEM IS SO GOOD I WISH I WROTE IT FIRST BECAUSE I AM IN LOVE. Sorry that ...

I don't know if it was by choice or if the editor screwed you over but I don't understand the structure of this poem whatsoever. If it is by choice ...

I would comment on structure but since this is in other and it kinda looks like poetry but it could be prose and its double spaced I really don't know ...

I thought this was a fair representation of friendship, and that's an uncommon subject in poetry so this was nice. I also like how you kept a constant rhyme with ...

I really like the metaphor of the light bulb representing her thoughts. This poem contained a lot of nice metaphors and unique description and is a pretty good poem overall ...

First of all, change the numbers. Having four different items all number as 1 makes no sense. You may have over looked it, but that is a very obvious thing ...

"That could’ve become fight very quickly" You should add the word "a" between become and fight "Dan followed after him since he had the same classes with him just about ...

I really like this poem and the subject matter it deals with. You have great grammar and spelling and all of that. But, the rhymig scheme is way off. I'm ...