happyslappy13

In this review, I'm going to sort of have to reiterate what DeepCrystal said, because it was mainly spot-on. So I guess I'll sort of reinforce it? Before that, though, ...

Woah. Freaky stuff. Lol Anyways, very interesting read. I assume this is a short story and not a series, so I'm going to treat it as such in this review. ...

Huh. Reading this, I actually got pretty involved. I don't know, just the way the main character narrates, or the way the two boys acted... it all felt very human. ...

This could totally be a song. Just sayin', maybe it is one. But I could totally see that last stanza being the refrain, and everything else the verse. But anyway, ...

Wow. I didn't realize it at first, but this is the first time I've basically an entire book in one post on this site. Unfortunately, I do not possess the ...

Wow. This. This is powerful. This seems like something my Lit teacher might assign for us to over-analyze (not in any way a bad thing) and I can see why. ...

Interesting first chapter you got here. I approve of this concept you have going so far ;) The most impactful advice I could give to your piece would be to ...

Lively descriptions. I like. Now, keep in mind I haven't read the previous entries from this story, but dang, there are a lot of characters with names beginning in "T." ...

Wow, short but powerful. Where do I begin? The imagery was astounding, and within seconds I had the scene portrayed in my mind. "cold, carving, wind" ... "clouds dimmed the ...

Huh. I really liked this. Something about your characters...; you personify them really well. Every part of Chaser's dialogue was intriguing, even made me laugh. And yet I can still ...

It's always good to see pokemon works on YWS. Pokemon the video game is very statistical and strategic, so putting it into characters is a nice feat. The only thing ...

Okay! Now of course I haven't read previous installments of this series, but that isn't going to stop me from reviewing, is it? What I like about your writing is ...

This is, actually, really amazing. You have discovered the method of translating words into emotions the reader can mentally experience from beginning to end. ;) Now, it not sure if ...

Splendid work! I love the way you reveal the futuristic aspects of the world directly and smoothly. The idea of the "Guppy race" is actually really fascinating. Your tone was ...

Exciting! Magnificent! Spectacular! You have captivated by attention, interest, and mind. Above all, you have fed my hunger for action. One recommendation, though, is not to have the entire thing ...