guineapiggirl

I am going to be sick. You have a disgusting imagination. This is a sickening piece of writing and it deserves at least an 18+ thingy. This is horrible. This ...

If I'm honest I didn't like this much. All I really knew was that there was a virgin and a prostitute. You didn't tell me anything about the characters and ...

I enjoyed this, although nothing particularly interesting happened. I think you built up the characters really well, and I liked how this boy was obviously knew to being a pirate. ...

So, the last bit of my review... Good ending bit but I think you should flesh it out a bit more before you get the whole whatever he's going to ...

I've read the whole flashback now- It's brilliant! Your description and characterization is suberb! I really loved the way you built up the personalities of all the characters and the ...

Chapter 2 – Under the Branches Paragraph 1- Good, nice. WHy do you call her 'the girl' though? She would suffice perfectly well, better even. Paragraph 2- Some lovely description ...

What? Confused? So, I thought you portrayed the insanity quite well. There were a few grammatical errors and places where I think you switched tense, so have a really good ...

Love how the title is longer than the story... So, I agree this should be extended. I think Paul should have to go on a quest to get the carrots... ...

Hmmm... I found this a bit boring. Sorry. I wasn't quite sure what exactly you were trying to put across. The title interested me but then there was nothing about ...

Firstly, the 'i's. I think you did this on purpose as it was consistent? I don't really like that effect. It doesn't really add anything and as a grammar pedant ...

I really want to know how she cheated! This was a very intriguing piece. Hmm... Interesting. Hmm. Yes. It's very free-flowing and such. I'm not entirely sure what to make ...

Interesting... You could expand this into some sort of interesting song. That could be a great chorus. There could be loads of verses about her getting tempted and stuff and ...

Very nice... The sort of thing that you could have inside a Mother's Day card. I like the bit about making mistakes; that's not such a traditional Mother view. Not ...

I think this poem has quite a good idea behind it and I like the lists of names she gets called. I thought some of the rhymes and rhythm were ...

Interesting. The different fonts confused me. I thought the rhyme scheme was a bit varied, you didn't have any sort of a, b, a, b or whatever. Personally, I like ...