Good Job... I really like your style. Plus, it's a good thing that you tried. The girl's heart resembles the heart of a devil, so that means she is lonely. Moreover, I suggest you add another stanza to this poem.
Happy Writing,
Chris
The Lonely Heart.
The girl was great at Art,
and one day she drew a heart,
but the Devil came
and said " Mine's the same"
we've both got a Devil's Heart.
Lol, I'm bad at Limerics, but I wanted to try.
Good Job... I really like your style. Plus, it's a good thing that you tried. The girl's heart resembles the heart of a devil, so that means she is lonely. Moreover, I suggest you add another stanza to this poem.
Happy Writing,
Chris
Interesting...
You could expand this into some sort of interesting song. That could be a great chorus.
There could be loads of verses about her getting tempted and stuff and why she's so lonely.
Considering the title, you need something in there about her being lonely. If not, you could call it 'The Devil's Heart'.
But, I actually quite liked. Well done. Message me if you do expand this.
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