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I personally liked it, the metaphor of a pheonix reborn was pretty good in my opinion. Don't take too much offence from Galerius, she has a tendency to be... how ...

very nicely done 8) and it's only the stephanie meyer kind of vamp I'm sick of, so you're safe :D This reminded me a lot of True Blood for some ...

... wow... very nice :D sadly, I can relate very, very well... anyways, here's a review :smt003 I was barely alive, till you entered my life. I was falling apart, ...

:D awesome story, you've got me hooked now what an evil ring... anyways, will be interesting to see what happens to Mariadelle, now that she's free to run away its ...

ooh... me likey... Anyways, back to reality. As the others have said, it lacks any sort of indication about the story, or your character. All we've been told is there's ...

and here i was trying not to think about it... i can relate to this too well very well done, you draw the reader in and show them what your ...

heya, you look like ur new... Welcome to YWS!!!... sorry i just had to say that, couldn't help myself very good poem, nice choice of words and interesting imagery im ...

heya! you've got a pretty good poem there, but it could probably use some improving but ScriboErgoSum beat me to it :( The stains on the carpet bleed color even ...

i liked it :D the parts before this one seemed a bit... i dunno... odd? but this chapter was interesting the characters can be confusing at times (jason came over ...

ahhh... i love it :D Tables turned. Now it's me who fills the room with dusk. Now it’s you who comes to listen past glimmering in your eyes. You used ...

i was happy 30 seconds ago :( in other words, well done! :D awsome imagery too, can imagine it so easily its creepy (or maybe that's just me?) very powerful ...

wow, awsome poem as the others said, really good imagery couldn't stop reading, even though someone was in my doorway yelling XD anyways, gotta go (yelling getting louder) brilliant job, ...

very nice job editing :D liked the poem alot, has alot of meaning and feeling behind it in the rewrite you addressed its problems very well... and now i don't ...

nice story, though a few things didn't make sense to me, i won't go into detail or give a proper critique at the moment, though i hope to be able ...

awsome :D liked how you put it together, though like they said before it could use more description. but im not sure if the colors are what need more description. ...