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Re: Aliens!
there were a few moments in this that were semi-funny...if you intended it to be that way...if not...just forget i said that... anyhow, this was lacking originality other than the ...
Jul 14, 2008 -
Re: In the Silent Valley
there wasn't much of a flow to this piece, which is a shame because your wording and imagery is beautiful. that's probably one of the only problems i found. that ...
Jul 14, 2008 -
Re: The Meaning of Life
i agree with hobbes that you have a very deep, intellectual outlook on life for a seventeen-year-old ha! i love how two 13-year-olds told you that! anyway, back to the ...
Jul 14, 2008 -
Re: Ups & Downs
as i think i can stated, it's annoying to reader's when you post the whole thing in one giant line. unlike him, however, i read the whole thing. it was ...
Jul 14, 2008 -
Re: An ode to those who dream
this poem was very well written, nice job! I loved the structure of it and the rhetorical questions you used in different lines. your images were really...individual and different. I'm ...
Jul 14, 2008 -
Re: never give more than you take
alright, so this was pretty good. i just have a few things to point out. Suddenly I soar away Everything else falls away. Here, you rhymed away with away. I'm ...
Jul 14, 2008 -
Re: The Rose
the imagery in this poem was great, however, i wasn't sure what exactly was going on when the guy got mad... did she dump him? is he just a freakishly ...
Jul 14, 2008 -
Re: Early Nature
As I awake to the rising sun, I look out the cold dew-covered window. Cold might not be needed in this sentence. If you take it out, you could either ...
Jul 14, 2008 -
Re: Hope
just to let you know, there is a song by Chris Brown called Wall To Wall, so, yeah. i liked this, though i'm not sure that the repetition of Wall ...
Jul 13, 2008 -
Re: Sympathy is a Sin
well, this was definately depressing. other reviews have covered the main issues that popped out at me. the biggest one that i saw--and this is just my opinion--is that you ...
Jul 13, 2008 -
Re: Leaving My Soul
personally, i was a tad lost throughout this poem, but you concept was deep...i guess... or my level of comprehension is very limited. this piece is very dark, and i'm ...
Jul 13, 2008 -
Re: Words from my heart
the only thing that was wrong that i noticed to be a problem was punctuation. and nolan already took care of that. the imagery and thought behind this poem was ...
Jul 13, 2008 -
Re: He took everything
this was...um...interesting...you have a lot of gramatical errors that i won't go into. you would simply need to go back and you'd notice them. the most reaccuring one was that ...
Jul 13, 2008 -
Re: That is Life
sapphire took most of the quotes, examples, etc. that i was thinking of using. so, in order to avoid being unconditionally redundant, let me just say that i really enjoyed ...
Jul 13, 2008 -
Re: KABOOM!
well, brother, i put off reviewing this for a while because i wasn't sure what i would say. but i think i got it down to the main points. this ...
Jul 13, 2008
