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  • Short Story » Science Fiction, General Re: Aliens!

    there were a few moments in this that were semi-funny...if you intended it to be that way...if not...just forget i said that... anyhow, this was lacking originality other than the ...

    Jul 14, 2008
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: In the Silent Valley

    there wasn't much of a flow to this piece, which is a shame because your wording and imagery is beautiful. that's probably one of the only problems i found. that ...

    Jul 14, 2008
  • Other » General, General Re: The Meaning of Life

    i agree with hobbes that you have a very deep, intellectual outlook on life for a seventeen-year-old ha! i love how two 13-year-olds told you that! anyway, back to the ...

    Jul 14, 2008
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Ups & Downs

    as i think i can stated, it's annoying to reader's when you post the whole thing in one giant line. unlike him, however, i read the whole thing. it was ...

    Jul 14, 2008
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: An ode to those who dream

    this poem was very well written, nice job! I loved the structure of it and the rhetorical questions you used in different lines. your images were really...individual and different. I'm ...

    Jul 14, 2008
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: never give more than you take

    alright, so this was pretty good. i just have a few things to point out. Suddenly I soar away Everything else falls away. Here, you rhymed away with away. I'm ...

    Jul 14, 2008
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: The Rose

    the imagery in this poem was great, however, i wasn't sure what exactly was going on when the guy got mad... did she dump him? is he just a freakishly ...

    Jul 14, 2008
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Early Nature

    As I awake to the rising sun, I look out the cold dew-covered window. Cold might not be needed in this sentence. If you take it out, you could either ...

    Jul 14, 2008
  • Lyrics » General, General Re: Hope

    just to let you know, there is a song by Chris Brown called Wall To Wall, so, yeah. i liked this, though i'm not sure that the repetition of Wall ...

    Jul 13, 2008
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Sympathy is a Sin

    well, this was definately depressing. other reviews have covered the main issues that popped out at me. the biggest one that i saw--and this is just my opinion--is that you ...

    Jul 13, 2008
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Leaving My Soul

    personally, i was a tad lost throughout this poem, but you concept was deep...i guess... or my level of comprehension is very limited. this piece is very dark, and i'm ...

    Jul 13, 2008
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Words from my heart

    the only thing that was wrong that i noticed to be a problem was punctuation. and nolan already took care of that. the imagery and thought behind this poem was ...

    Jul 13, 2008
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: He took everything

    this was...um...interesting...you have a lot of gramatical errors that i won't go into. you would simply need to go back and you'd notice them. the most reaccuring one was that ...

    Jul 13, 2008
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: That is Life

    sapphire took most of the quotes, examples, etc. that i was thinking of using. so, in order to avoid being unconditionally redundant, let me just say that i really enjoyed ...

    Jul 13, 2008
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: KABOOM!

    well, brother, i put off reviewing this for a while because i wasn't sure what i would say. but i think i got it down to the main points. this ...

    Jul 13, 2008


so many languages have fallen / off of the edge of the world / into the dragon's mouth.
— Lucille Clifton