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Hm, interesting. I wish I could write you a better review here (I might later today), but I have to get offline. I just wanted to say that I loved ...

It sounds more like something you would read on the back of a book. It's really interesting. If I picked this up and read this in a book store, I'd ...

I agree with the others. Also, I would suggest not using so many exclaimation points, especially when Jade is speaking. You don't need them. A period is just fine and ...

I don't really have a critique for you, but I just wanted to say that I really liked this. Very good developed characters. Interesting plot. I can't wait to see ...

Wow. I don't know what else to say. ;) It was amazing. There was so much emotion, and the plot was just downright brilliant. I definently think you'll win the ...

I'll make this short and sweet. I have to agree with a few others, you're telling the story, not showing it. I know you say it is just the beginning, ...

Wonderful writing. ;) But you're right, it is typical. The 'Love-Hate' relationship is very prevalent in the Romance genre. Not saying that that's bad. It's just... over-used. And of course, ...

I have to agree. More paragraphs would be nice. ;) It will present your story better. Anyway, on to the critique. The dying screams of her mother still echoed in ...

Just a few errors and suggestions: At once he felt There is supposed to be a comma after 'At once'. Nothing too big. ;) At once he felt the feeling ...

I saw the movie, and am still looking for the book. The entire plot was powerful. I absolutely loved it. It's one of my favourites. If you haven't seen the ...

I always said That I couldn't like you I even thought That I should've hated you But my mind's only playing Games with my heart again This part seems kinda ...

I'm not very good at critiquing, but I do want to say that this introduction really caught my interest. My first thought was 'What happened? What's going on?', which in ...