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hi! i liked it, i just had one problem... i can't say i particularly liked the repitition of "i miss you, i need you" and then you completely broke the ...

wow. truly an amazing story. top marks :D because the names Ruth and Rosa both begin with R i got a little confused at the start especially in parts like ...

awww i love this! it's so sweet and true!! my favourite bit is... And when that bastard breaks your heart I promise to be there With three boxes of tissues, ...

hey this was really good and had nice flow and rhythm Scrapes, cut, burns and bruise. it goes plural, single, plural, single, and i don't really like it. i think ...

hi wow i think the first poem was the best, the second was ok. i had to read it twice to realize it was talking about actually swinging, like at ...

Hi i haven't heard "Waltz for a night" but i'll do my best to reveiw your lyrics anyway. this was good and sweet and all but it lacked the general ...

im... speachless. wow. i LOVED it!!! Please take it close to your heart - I’m really happy we’re alive. Always ready for a new start, I couldn’t ask for more ...

wow the story line is one commonly used but you truly made it your own in this piece :D She stands in the rain waiting for the bus her tears ...

hey this was cool Looking at you r teary eyes Delightful, your tears are gone Together we fly and break free Deceit and lies, all now gone, Content to run, ...

whoa! cool. i'm not a fan of info dumps but this was really interesting and is necessary to set the scene. i noticed something strange. at the end of each ...

wow this was really cool i can't wait to see more. i only had one problem... The door opened suddenly, saying suddenly kind of takes all the suddenness out of ...

Nice start :D Eric Chadsworth is leaning hmm, i think you could replace 'is leaning' with leans. to me it sounds better against the picture window of his study dressed ...

hi i agree with elinor, you need to expand more on this awesome idea. I was like, cool, cool, cool, oh it's over. one line that confused me was... One ...

wow. this was really awesome. it lacked a bit of colourful desrciption and because it's in first person it tended to be too much like 'i did this, i did ...

hi Waterlilygirl throught out this whole piece you keep tense switching. one minute you'd be describing it as though you were looking back to the past and then all of ...