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It's lovely - you have a beautiful style and I love the way you've used imagery here without using too many cliches. I particularly like: We stare towards one another ...

I really disagree with that. It's true that it's not a very interesting premise, but that's part of the appeal of the poem. Although it's slightly pointless, you have a ...

OK. I've put spelling/grammar errors in bold and then a couple of things which don't make sense in italics (I know they might change the rhythm, but you don't seem ...

I think this is absolutely beautiful. I love the way you've used capitals at the end there, and the way you've personified the cigarette. The poem has a lovely flow ...

I liked this and my attention was definitely caught by it. I think you've used some lovely techniques here and you have a unique style of writing. A few things ...

The imagery you've used here is fantastic. Obviously the meaning does matter, but this is one of those pieces where the way the meaning is presented is good enough for ...

Firstly, this is a really good poem. You have a large vocabulary and are using it to your advantage rather than just randomly slamming words down that you think sound ...

This is a really difficult subject to write about and I think you've handled it well. Most of the time if a young person tried to write about suicide it ...

Interesting... I definitely liked it. There's not very much to say, because I can't think of anything you could improve on, and I don't think you should lengthen it because ...

I liked this story - I could relate to your characters well, and I really felt sorry for Andre. I agree with most of the above points; though I do ...

I'm not going to do a huge review like last time, just mention a few things you could improve on. The grammar still needs a lot of work, though I ...

OK, you're right, the punctuation isn't great, so I'm just going to do a massive grammar check for you. This is quite a big problem; I would suggest just going ...

This poem really rings true with me, as I myself truly hate doing things just because other people will like me for doing them, and I really get annoyed by ...

I like it! There's not much to say that hasn't already been said, but I think it's a great idea and definitely worth following up. I would be interested to ...

You do write well, but the two things I would pick up on are a) your sentences, which are long and have too many clauses, and b) the amount of ...