Good Morning/Afternoon/Evening/Night(whichever one it is in your part of the world),
Hi! I'm here to leave a quick review!!
Anyway let's get right to it,
Do you believe that people have a destiny? Something greater than blending in with a crowd? Something more important than fitting in or getting good grades? Something more than a normal, mundane life? I do.
I hope its true, if only because I do none of the above. I don’t fit in, I don’t get good grades, but I do have a wonderfully normal life . . . for now.
My name is Jensen Jones.
I am a normal fifteen year old high schooler.
I want to remain a normal high school girl.
Okay this is an interesting start. That question posed right at the start there certainly makes you sit up and take notice a bit, which is always a good sign and then transitioning into what is basically this sort of introduction actually works quite well I think. It tells you quite a bit about this person and hints at what they might have gone through all of which makes you want to read on which is what you want from the start of a prologue, well let's see where this takes us.
Staying under the radar, out of the spotlight, is my only goal.
I’m not incredibly pretty, nor smart; I’m not even tall, but I’m a mystery.
That little fact makes me an oddity, a story to be dissected. I came to the small city of Nampa, Idaho two years ago. I am an orphan. I don’t, infact, remember my parents. The lack of those memories, that tiny thing, makes me cringe at the thought, do to that truth, and some . . . other things, I am different.
Alright, well we're learning more and more on this person as we continue here and so far things are continuing in that earlier vein you were getting by here. The interest is most definitely present and its all painting quite a nice picture to start with, and a very vivid picture at that.
But I doubt you picked up this, my story, to listen to an angsty teenager ramble on about how horrid her life is, so, on to my other words.
Do you truly believe we were meant for greater things then feeding the dog? As I also stated earlier, i do.
Hmmm well the ending is certainly an intriguing one as well. It seems like it stutters to a stop rather than rising up, which is a tiny bit of a problem, especially considering this is a prologue, but that might just be me. Otherwise, it is a lovely question there to end on and I think for the most part you've done a really solid job of constructing this piece here.
Aaaaand that's it for this one.
As always remember to take what you think was helpful and forget the rest.
Stay Safe
Harry
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