faith

I liked seemed almost repetitive with the cold cold cold imagery, but I found it very...soothing to read for some reason.

heh...for some reason the part about her eating her sister's eyes really amused me. it seems like it ended a bit was cleverly written and i would be interested in ...

yeah, it got an 'A' ... but the teacher said the ammount of beer bottles was unrealistic. I don't know though, it would take a lot of beer to kill ...

mmm i really like this poem. a little messy, maybe try to take out lines that dont really fit, shorten it up a bit...

yes, it is

hmm...sounds like the lyrics to a linkin park song.

this actually made me feel vaguely optimistic after i read it. cheerful poetry is underrated.

you paint a vivid picture of infatuation. not terribly original but some elegant writing in there, some nice lines: Angel eyes rub the salt into my weeping wounds

i like the first line, like you're responding to a comment we can't hear. 'but' is one of my favorite ways to start a poem, actually, along with 'and'. probably ...

hmm, pretty good but the last line sounds kind of like one of those PA ads on TV like, 'dont become another statistic- don't drink and drive' hahaha

you warned in the title that it wasn't suitable for small children, so its fine to stay here in my opinion.

*drools* ooh vampires... This reminds me a lot of an Ann Rice novel. Same ornate, formal language and faint dry wit in places. not terribly original, but well written.

I liked this- it had good attention to detail, but not so much that is bogged down the story. just the little things like mozzerella sticks scattered across the living ...

this is really clever and original, good work.

I didn't like this as well as 'the day America will fall'. It was a little less complex, didn't have as much impact. It seemed that unlike your other poem, ...