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Re: all i'm sure of is that he's someone i've always known
Hi FireEyes! erilea, rusty YWSer, member of Team Chicken, and Hadestown lover here for a review. I like how your poem begins sort of like an adapted invocation of the ...
Aug 1 -
Re: 1: Summer hello
Hi Ayme! My name's erilea and I'm representing Team Chicken. :] It's been a while since I've done a review, so pardon my rustiness! Flow Vesna switched off the engine ...
Aug 1 -
Re: Call Me Icarus (Shoot Me Down Before the Sun Does) and Other May Poems
Hey! erilea here for a review. :] I was drawn to this title because I also use mythology often in my poetry, so I was excited to see how you ...
Jun 4, 2024 -
Re: according to zeno's paradox
Hey figmoon! I hope you're doing well; I'm hopping by for one of my first reviews in a while, so pardon me if I'm a little rusty. 1) I love ...
Jun 13, 2022 -
Re: Delicate Knowledge
Hey koinoyokan! I'm erilea, and I'm here on Review Day from Team Gryffindor. :) 1) The first thing I wanted to suggest is in this line: A boy lived in ...
Apr 26, 2020 -
Re: The Desert Rose 1.1
Heyo! It's been a while, hasn't it? It's erilea here to review your lovely chapter. While I'm not officially doing RevMo, the guilt is getting to me. :D That being ...
Sep 3, 2019 -
Re: Stains
Hey, salia4! Good to see you again! :D I do agree that while the idea is there, your execution needs a bit more fulfillment. The colon structure doesn't convey your ...
Jul 15, 2019 -
Re: Like A Rose
Hi, EagleFly! I decided to crawl out of my hole to write a review. :D One of the first things I noticed is the line breaks within this poem. A ...
Apr 3, 2019 -
Re: The Staircase
Hey, Sree! It's erilea here to give you a review. :) Let's get to it! 1) My tiny legs are filled with pep. It tries to take the first step. ...
Sep 3, 2018 -
Re: Waiting for Bus 26
Hey, Dest! This is erilea, and I wanted to say thank you for giving me such a nice review on my story and following me. So, I followed you back ...
Sep 2, 2018 -
Re: Dea Lunae
Hey, Spilledink! It's erilea here for a review. Let's get into it! :) 1) The moon rosas shone upon the luscious face "Luscious" means having a good taste, or delicious. ...
Aug 26, 2018 -
Re: Percy Jackson fan fic (title in works) Part 5
Hey, TheWeirdoFromBeyond! It's erilea here for a short review. :) Let's get on with it! 1) I've noticed you don't always use commas where they're needed. For example, before coordinating ...
Aug 12, 2018 -
Re: Those Were the Days
Heya, 1nspire! It's erilea here for a quick review. :) Let's get to it! 1) The sight of it sent memories careening through hiss head, forcing his eyes closed. This ...
Aug 11, 2018 -
Re: let me go
Hey, magiccharm2002! Lupa here for a rusty review. :D Let's get right to it. 1) I drink and dance until I'm out. What confuses me is your use of "completely ...
Jul 19, 2018 -
Re: Phantom - 2.1
Hey, LadyBird! It's Lupa here for a review. :D Let's get right to it. 1) But instead, being his awkward conversationalist self, he decided to ask about the SCS. “So, ...
Jul 3, 2018