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Wow, thanks for all the nice comments! :oops: I really appreciate it.

Thanks for reading and commenting on this. I changed it with some of the suggestions you made (like hand by hand... oops :)).

haha I get it. The Tell-Tale Heart by Poe, right? I found it funny. It took me a minute to get it, but yeah. You don't have to give me ...

Hmm. I think I felt that at some parts; could you be more specific or was it just a general thing? Eh. Now that I re-read it, I can't really ...

heh The ending was kind of surprising. But it was so nice to read...

I think it's a little rushed. One thing leads to another rather quickly and without some explanation. It's a little too confusing right now to be really engrossed in. You ...

It seemed a tad bit like a child talking back to his mother about how he is right and she is wrong. Not sure if you were going for that ...

I think you should develop this a lot more. I mean, it could go on to discuss some other things, but it just... ends. There's really not much that can ...

Thanks for all the comments. I know it's a bit confusing right now, but it's just my first draft so... yeah. JigSaw: The 'He was always petrified to return' sentence ...

The only thing I had a problem with was this line: So, I rewrite my thoughts, It doesn't seem to flow with the rest of the poem. I liked it ...

It didn't really stand out to me, but it wasn't bad. Just not something extraordinary.

I really just skimmed it. It sounded pretty good, but it was a bit clumped, so I didn't feel like reading it all... But honestly? The real reason I even ...

The new style works- it flows nicely and was intriguing as well. Nice job.

The poem revolved around a theme that we all naturally feel and had common words to match. After reading, I didn't really feel like I read something more than words. ...

heh I liked it. I like those clever metaphors and fancy words. Nice job :D