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This line confused me: I went to burn on of your pictures I get the jist of it, but the actual lines of the poem make it all the more ...

Was this taken from real experience, or not? I didn't really like it either way. It lacked any description and, I guess, content, to make it interesting. Though the characters ...

My god, Silverstar... Sorry, but I think that you proved your point in saying you hated the book. I respect your first comments, and even the three afterward, but you ...

The repetitiveness in this was painfully obvious and it sort of restricted the poem. It seemed to cut off in mid-thought, too. The girl-house relationship seems to not be working ...

In the end, it seemed like the man would say something more or something clever, but that's really in your hands, not mine. Anyway, it was good for a practice ...

Hmm... I liked it. It seemed personal, which I think it probably was...? For the whole bedroom thing, it seemed kind of weird when the person says that he doesn't ...

Heh... Your name, avatar, and opening line made me set my mood for a horror-type poem. Anyways... I didn't really like it, but I didn't not like it. It didn't ...

Interesting... The ending was sort of a surprise to me. It seemed like it was going to be the more cliche 'I am dead' kind of poem, but it wasn't. ...

Nice descriptions. There are some good phrases the describe what is going on. However, you can't rely on one good phrase to make the whole sentence descriptive. It seems to ...

The little snippet in the beginning doesn't really seem to be necessary... The reason for her complacency of course was the weather. I don't think you should go right out ...

I guess the beginning is supposed to be trying to draw readers in and slightly sarcastic, but it seemed sort of cheesy, especially when you switch to first-person perspective in ...

Just one thing that bugged me. don't wanna be just the flavor of the week. don't wanna be the next backstreet boys- you're in, and then you're out. The point ...

First of all, welcome to YWS! If you're anything like me, you'll like it here. ;) All right then. My secruity lost, Just a typo...security This felt really simple, but ...

The buzz of insects sounds Like the scree of a monster scream? screech? It seemed very broken and disconnected, as if you would say one idea and then jump to ...

I think you should break this up into a few paragraphs. It was really tough to read, especially since you were describing so many things. You also had nice phrases ...