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I think this belongs in the 'Other Poetry' instead of 'Dramatic Poetry.' But anyways... and we moap Typo, I think... mope? It was really lighthearted and nondescriptive... I guess that ...

it’s fine with me if you want to screw poetic metaphor and just say flat out, “I like you,” I liked this line :D Anyway, the overall poem is pretty ...

Actually, this is NOT bad. or it could've been than it was your own song Just a typo. You had 'than' instead of 'that.' It's kind of dull, but not ...

Songs go to the 'lyrics' section... There were some rough lines, such as: When I see you crying through my door ajar You could tell it was forced, but I ...

There was a very nice rhythm going for this. The random rhymes everywhere were sort of irritating, but only when they were apparent. The last two stanzas were a bit ...

It seemed a little unrealistic and blunt. I know it's fantasy fiction, but the realistic parts didn't seem very... real. There were some grammatical/spelling errors, like Kay Kay said. To ...

If I listen, can I now my future? know my future There were some parts where I noticed the same words repeated. Though it wasn't really a huge deal, it ...

What a pradox Just a typo [I think]. paradox It was pretty light and had a good rhythm with its tone. The questions kind of bothered me... like a little ...

Well... I think it's spelled yesterday ... sometime I wish you could just say what you wanted to say I wish I could do what my fantasies potraid There is ...

Grammar time! Right... so you have some grammar errors/things that just bothered me. "It is almost time for.....The end. Only three dots are needed, but this is just one of ...

I know I sleep To my home on high I think this should be changed to: To my home up high , but that's just my thoughts. It was pretty ...

Some commas that were put in made the read a bit difficult [because I would stop, but it was really meant to be read on]. A little choppy, but not ...

The pain is unbearable, I can't take it anymore, This part is pretty straightforward, which makes it cliche. Try describing the pain, instead of just saying it's 'unbearable.' The adrenaline ...

This was pretty good, but I think you need to work on rhythm and verb tense. Rhythm example: Two sinless beings with no meaning for shame One destiny: only to ...

I believe beguile means 'to deceive by using wit.' In fact, this is the more popular meaning. However, it could also mean 'to charm,' which is sort of what Sam ...