I'll Find Yesterday

I liked it, but there seemed to be no real structure. I seemed kind of... all over the place. Perhaps you should try to focus on one point.

It's good but i don't understand, potraid?
Your writing is very...hard to but into words..
I like it though!

This is awesome, I really enjoyed it! Personally, I'm a huge fan of any poetry that is free verse, and you've created an awesome style for yourself that flows so well. There's something so amazingly real about this poem, and there are many clever little insightful parts that make it so human. A lot of poems lack anything that connects with the real world but you seem to have a knack for creating this remarkable connection. I absolutely loved it. Please keep writing!

'skip, Sean, skip to the beat of a broken drum
use those legs for something useful.'

Oh gosh...that's very awesome...

'Leave the past behind you

Ah...someday I will.'

AND SHE STICKS THE LANDING!!! Very well done.

I seriously think this is the best poem you've ever written, my dear friend. It's dreamy and smooth but it makes an impact, it's abstract but painfully close-to-home. *golf clap*

I really enjoyed this. Besides the spelling mistakes, it flowed very well and you made the words come alive. Very nice. Please keep writing

Wow hekategirl I have to say you've REALLY HUMUNGOUSLY improved since I was last year. Oh, wait. That doesnt really sound like a compliment, does it? But it is! You're so much better than you were just a few months ago. Wicked! I'm seriously impressed. I love this poem. It could use a bit of polish, yes, and there are several spelling mistakes [stares you down pointedly] BUT overall its very good. I like the way its kinda wistful. True, its not deep exactly. But in some parts it shows great insight and I think you ought to be congratulated. Cheers!

I like how it has a dreamy quality, like a faded memory.. This is my favorite part.

Was it me?

I don't remember.


I like this too. Probably because they have the same theme.

Where were we going anyway?

Does it really matter now?

Well... I think it's spelled yesterday...

sometime I wish you could just say what you wanted to say
I wish I could do what my fantasies potraid
There is no sometime, but there is a sometimes. In the second line, I think you are saying 'portrayed,' but I'm not sure. A typo?

I liked the coy parts of this; they were very cleverly written. However, that's all that seems to be in it. It's mixed in with emotions, but it's mainly what I see. I guess being clever isn't bad, but I think you could go beyond that. Use the clever phrases by connecting them with deeper meaning.