electricbluemonkey

Ha, that was pretty good. I've never really seen a persuasive article that short though. Good job on using the word 'bathroom tissue' instead of toilet paper. Much more...civilized.

This is pretty good, waffle man. Don't really have any changes to add. The dialogue works well to move the plot along. Only other thing I can add is... The ...

Ah, Gal, you beat me to what I wanted to say. I would, too, recommend Ode D'Mort (although I still think its incorrect). Or L'Odeur D'Mort or just something about ...

Ahh, I knew there was something strange about 'flourescent'. I was about to look it up on but decided not to. I also agree with Crysi about the "mix together" ...

Bob! This was...delicious. The flow was amazing, the last line was awesome. I think MetalHead's way to write this is good. I think the last line should be made into ...

Thats very...nice. Although Shark Week's on Discovery Channel, not Animal Planet. Very dramatic...yeah, 'cause when you said that stuff it was...dramatic.

Politically incorrect jokes are the best. That was highly amusing, and the rhymes actually made sense. It wasn't just like, "The man was out of luck/ Then he ate a ...

I just wanna know why this isnt the featured story.

I like it, but it seems a little rushed.

That is quite good. Good meaning to them.

This *was* very interesting. Its different, kind of, from other poems. I don't really know what it is about it, but I liked it. Although the rhyming was sometimes pretty ...

That was...good. Kinda confusing at time, but very artistic. The italicized sentences in the beginnings were a great way to start out the poem. Although I once had a (woman) ...

Impressive indeed, but the overly hyped use of "The" in the beginning of half of the poem was annoying.

It didn't really have anything to do with Green Day until the end, but that was pretty good. Funny at times, although Green Day sucks. Well, new Green Day sucks, ...

That was...short. Okay poem, sometimes a little forced in the rhyming. Great metaphors.