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My Loves

by Sharty


Nothing can rival my first piece of magnificence, but this comes close.

I like sharks
I like sharks
And money
And money
I'm so rich
I own a shark
Someday
I'm going to overtake
Animal Planet
And make
SHARK YEAR
Because Shark Week
Will never suffice


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Sun Oct 01, 2006 7:48 pm
BohemeMistress says...



every year should be shark year! very cute and enjoyable




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Wed Sep 27, 2006 5:19 pm
Sharty says...



Well Imp, one can hardly crit brilliance...
For once you speak in truth.

As for the fact you say I have a lot to learn? It is you, in fact, who is out of place, telling the man who grew up during the French Revolution that he has a lot to learn. You're quite correct it is nice to have me here.




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Thu Aug 10, 2006 2:09 pm
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Poor Imp wrote:I don't think there's anything else to say; unless you've decided you'd like to have all your magnifecence read and critiqued.


Well Imp, one can hardly crit brilliance... :roll:

Lol, you've got a LOT to learn, Sharty... But *struggles* but... I suppose it's nice to have you on board... *head/desk*

As for this piece, it was amusing, a quick read-through, but uhhh... I wouldn't exactly call it masterpiece, man...




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Thu Aug 10, 2006 1:23 pm
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I refer you simply to my other post on a similar topic. While you're there, please read Dream Deep's as well.

Poor_Imp's right; there's nothing else to say.




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Thu Aug 10, 2006 7:25 am
Sharty says...



Perhaps saying he and I are friends is a falsehood, for in truth, I thought he was rather cocky. And he did better than I in college! He cheated!




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Thu Aug 10, 2006 7:15 am
Poor Imp says...



Ah. Well then, good luck with the ...poetry and all that that implies. ^_^

I don't think there's anything else to say; unless you've decided you'd like to have all your magnifecence read and critiqued.




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Thu Aug 10, 2006 7:14 am
Sharty says...



He didn't like sharks!




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Thu Aug 10, 2006 7:12 am
Sharty says...



I happen to be friends with Oscar Wilde.




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Thu Aug 10, 2006 7:09 am
Poor Imp says...



You're not channeling Oscar Wilde by any chance, are you, Sharty? Not that he had a shark infatuation...

Isn't the time it takes to read, think over, and critique a piece of art the highest form admiration? ^_~




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Thu Aug 10, 2006 5:40 am
Sharty says...



Don’t you tell me what channel Shark Week is on! Don't forget who I am--the shark expert! i think I know what channel Shark Week is shown on. It's definitely not Discovery channel.

By the way, are you critiquing me?!! I did not come to this site to be critiqued, but to be admired! I suppose this is a rather cliché saying, but it has come time for me to admit it to myself: I am truly misunderstood. But isn’t that true for all artists?




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Wed Aug 09, 2006 11:29 pm
Cameron says...



Words fall short of a poem that defies expression lol




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Wed Aug 09, 2006 8:15 pm
Elizabeth says...



............ I like/love sharks too... and I never thought about making a shark year...
I'm not rich though...

(Oh well I love sharks and money too, it's awesome)




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Wed Aug 09, 2006 8:04 pm
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I like sharks
I like sharks
And money
And money
I'm so rich
I own a shark
Someday
I'm going to overtake
Animal Planet
And make
SHARK YEAR
Because Shark Week
Will never suffice

Thats what you have

This is what it should be

I like sharks
I love sharks
And money
It's great
I'm so rich
I own a shark
And someday
I'm gunna overtake
Animal Planet
And create
SHARK YEAR
Because Shark Week
Don't cut it

Eh? eh? Whaddayathink?

Very nice work though Sharty.




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Wed Aug 09, 2006 7:33 pm



Thats very...nice. Although Shark Week's on Discovery Channel, not Animal Planet. Very dramatic...yeah, 'cause when you said that stuff it was...dramatic.





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