electricbluemonkey

Wow...the beginning was amazing, simply amazing. Just how a poem should be, to lure a reader into the story and make him/her keep guessing and wanting to read more and ...

Wow, the last line were awesome. And the way you closed it, with "Lost" was a really good idea. It was very enjoyable, and has a lot of potential, because ...

Good. A light, fast read, which seemed very much like a song, but I enjoyed it a lot. I didn't get your whole idea on this, but the general feel ...

If you ask me, you added way too much detail to this poem, and way too much description that it definetely didnt need. You should take out a few parts ...

Wow....sorry, but that was very confusing. Some lines didnt make any sense, and it just gave me a headache trying to actually visualize them. And every time you said "SHOUT!" ...

I don't really agree. The message that your trying to tell the reader is very off to me, but I guess I get some of it. The rhyming made me ...

Yeah, its too short if you ask me. Considering as a first stanza, its pretty good, and it explains a bit what the poem is going to be about but ...

Hmm, that was a pretty good poem. It flowed very well, and your rhyming style was very creative, but I didnt really get all of it. The main idea was ...

A poem without meaning?! But this was one of the most meaningful poems I ever read! If you don't know the meaning, I'll just take a wild guess, its what ...

I must say, Wulie, this was one of your best...but no "[ ]"?! The flow of this poem was just really good, although there was mispellings at parts, the flow ...

Hmm, it was short and sweet but I couldn't really feel what you were writing there. Like Firestarter said, you need to add more depth to it, because I couldn't ...

Hmm, I think it was too long. It just considered too many issues over one stanza to the next one, and every stanza was more like different poems, really. The ...

Whoa...uh, lets just say that it isn't one of your best. It was just too confusing, everything was happening at once, and everything was kind of nothing actually. Way too ...

*Joins Incandescence* Oh...jeez...although that was a really good poem, about halfway anyway...but a little too graphic don't you think? I liked your style, by the way. Wow, it was a ...

Considering that it was an old poem, although I don't know what age you were when you wrote this, it was a pretty good poem. I think you can do ...