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Alright, I'm here as promised! Corrections, questions and things that I found awkward are in red. Things that I really liked are in purple. My comments are in bold. When ...

I live! And...I am here as promised. Your sexy bread really got me motivated. Red is the stuff that I'm all picky-like about. Bold is my comments. Purple is the ...

Here as requested, and I only really have one complaint. I agree with mizz-iceberg about one stanza, this one: "You can't leave me." The words dripped from my mouth, like ...

Awwe xD I read this...while my dog was sitting in my lap xD I gave her a big hug when I was done. I loved this, it was so adorable. ...

xD Tam, I love you!! We've got to make this our national anthem. Definately. It made me laugh the whole way through, and I may or may not have started ...

Okay, so I would just like to say that I actually liked this. Quite a bit. The imagery was good, and you used lines that were mostly fresh and new, ...

Oh my goodness, I feel so accomplished! I got to this before it was too late! :D Chapter-2 The train was moving to and fro, giving me jerks now and ...

Woah... nice! Did not see that one coming at all! I really liked this last scene, it was really good! I don't have anything to point out... That whole twist ...

o.o Didn't see that one coming.... I suddenly disdain/love Mark. This was really quite good! Only thing: Clerk: (Pulls out the document) Just kidding! I just love seeing that look ...

I looked left and right, all around the room, using the super-sonic sight I was blessed with. I had to find some clothing, realizing that my body was bear. I ...

Well then. I am very late on this because I wasn't home very much at all yesterday. Sadly, everybody got to everything before me...again... I need to start speeding these ...

Well, Skins seems to have beaten me to this... Heh... That doesn't surprise me though. Anywho... This was a bit shorter than the other scenes, but I liked it. I ...

Hey! I really did like this poem...a lot actually! I just have one tiny little nitpick that I'd like to point out. The land we well know I just found ...

The comments, corrections and suggestions will all be in red :D It is night time, almost three in the morning. The streets of Birchwick are peaceful. Some houses are dark ...

Once again I am late on the draw! I am getting good at this whole late thing... Well, everybody seems to have everything covered already. I really actually like Viv's ...