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LOL sorry Ember for the delay, been a busy few days. I'm actually after Isha here *gasp*. Ok, I loved this scene. I'm glad Andrea won't forgive the doctor because some characters might have caved. Not me. I hold a grudge.

That's it, I'm off to the next!

Tanya

Well, Skins seems to have beaten me to this...
Heh... That doesn't surprise me though.
Anywho...
This was a bit shorter than the other scenes, but I liked it. I don't really know why, but Mark's intervention just sort of made my day. I think it was the prospect of somebody beating up a doctor that seemed interesting to me. Something you don't hear about everyday I suppose.
I can't wait to read the next scene!
Good job!

thanks for that Skins! I'm sorry, I should have shown you the previous scenes first! here they are if you get the chance:

...Aut Mortatis Conans: Scene 1 & 2

...Aut Mortatis Conans: Scene 3

...Aut Mortatis Conans: Scene 4

...Aut Mortatis Conans: Scene 5

...Aut Mortatis Conans: Scene 6

Your review is still valuable despite your lack of script experience!

Heya
Here to review as requested!

Now, to put it bluntly, I am absolutely shi* at reviewing scripts. So because of that, don't take my critique too seriously at all. I'll give it a go though! Also, I'm assuming that you've already written the first 6 scenes of this? If so, I haven't read the first 6 so I might not understand this as well as I could. Anyway, enough excuses; onto the review!

Scene 7: Back to the Empty Party

[Dr. L is seated across from Andrea, Mark is absent. The Doc has a bottle of booze in his hand. The stress is killing him.]

Dr. L: So as you can see, I was trapped. She would take away everything I had worked for. My life would be destroyed. (Takes a swig of booze) And after all that she didn’t even get her hands on your inheritance.

Andrea: (After a tense thoughtful moment) Let me get this straight. You had to choose between my mother’s life…#BF0000 "> space here and your career. Greg, I don’t see much of a compromise in that situation.

Dr. L: Andrea, you don’t understand what it was like –

Andrea: (Raising her voice) No, I think I do understand what it was like. You killed my mother so you could keep your job! #FF0000 ">This is a human life we’re talking about! Something about this sentence sounded a bit odd to me. I think it was the whole 'human life' bit. My mother’s life!

Dr. L: (Standing up and yelling) Don’t you think I have regretted the moment that I made that choice? It cut me so deep; I’ll never touch another pregnant woman again!

Andrea: Oh poor you! Poor you! You’ll never touch a pregnant woman! Well guess what#FF0000 ">, Greg? I’ll never know my mothers love. I’ll never hug her, kiss her, or tell her I’m all grown up. (Crying) She won’t see me get married…#FF0000 "> space here don’t you dare tell me about grief!

Dr. L: (Breaking down) I’m – I’m so sorry Andrea… #FF0000 ">space I’m sorry! All I feel is guilt#FF0000 ">, You don't necessarily need this comma. every waking moment! It eats me from the inside… #FF0000 ">space. I can feel it destroying me! All these years… #FF0000 ">space againall I’ve ever wanted… #FF0000 ">and again was forgiveness.

Andrea: (Looks at him incredulously) You have some nerve. (Starts walking away then she turns back) I will never forgive you#FF0000 ">. I think an exclamation mrk would be suited here.

Dr. L: (Looses #FF0000 ">it I think that you need to be more specific. Say Looses temper instead of it. , grabbing her by the arm) Please! Please Andrea!

Andrea: let go of me!!

[Mark enters]

Mark: What the hell?!! You dare lay your hands on my fiancé?! (Grabs Greg and begins to fight with him)

Andrea: (Quickly moves away from the fighting men and dials her cell) Hello? Police? I have an intruder in my house.

[Black out]