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eldEr wrote a review · Sat May 15, 2010 4:23 pm

Once again I am late on the draw! I am getting good at this whole late thing...
Well, everybody seems to have everything covered already.
I really actually like Viv's manner of speaking. It's the way I like to speak, although slightly more evil...
Anyways...
Nicely done and I can't wait till scene 7!

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I was equally as clueless about "hussy"... I'm not the best at deciding age ratings I'm afraid... except for the obvious extremes! And I don't really write a lot of that kind of material. I apologise for any offensiveness Mikesly, but I really don't think it qualifies for a 16 rating... besides that word, what do you think of the writing?

Thanks for your review once again Tanya! Haha, I don't really need to keep writing, as I wrote the whole play a long time ago, I'm just posting the scenes bit by bit. I guess I can start editing though...

Um, is 'hussy' a bad word? Not where I come from. Hum...

Anyway, Ember, another great chapter! Er, scene. I enjoyed it and I have no nitpicks about it. Vivica is truly evil ... But that's the point, isn't it?

Great work, keep writing!
Tanya :D

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12 year old children get to be exposed to words like "hussy"?



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