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Young Writers Society



YWS (parody of Y.M.C.A)

by ArcticMonkey


I'm not sure if somebody has done this, but I thought that I'd give it a try. I need a bit of help with it because some words don't seem very natural. Oh, and this is my first parody!

Writers, you may feel quite afraid
I said writers, cause’ you may need some aid
I said writers; you have to pull yourself up
You will feel really happy

Writers, there’s a website to go on
I said writers, something to smile upon
You can join there, and I’m sure you’ll attend
You’re bound to find some great friends

It’s fun to be at the YWS
It’s fun to be at the YWS
It’s got everything to, make you smile
We know you’ll be there for quite a while

Its fun to be at the YWS
It’s fun to be at the YWS
You can post your work up
You can get good critique
You can learn some new, great technique

Writers. Are you listening to me
I said writers, I’m sure you’ll agree
I said writers; you can make your dreams big
But you have to remember…

Writers, if you become famous
I said writers, remember where you came from
And mention you were at YWS
It’s something you need to express

It’s fun to be at the YWS
It’s fun to be at the YWS
It’s got everything to make you smile
We know you’ll be there for quite a while

Its fun to be at the YWS
It’s fun to be at the YWS
You can post your work up
You can get good critique
You can learn some new, great technique

Writers, you may feel quite afraid
I said writers, cause’ you may need some aid

I said writers; you have to pull yourself up
You will feel really happy

Writers, there’s a website to go on
I said writers, something to smile upon
You can join there, and I’m sure you’ll attend
You’re bound to find some great friends

It’s fun to be at the YWS
It’s fun to be at the YWS
It’s got everything to make you smile
We know you’ll be there for quite a while

YWS
It’s fun to be at the YWS
It’s fun to be at the YWS
Writers, writers, you may feel afraid
Writers, writers, you may need some aid

YWS
Just join the YWS
Writers, writers, get some good critique
Writers, writers, learn some new, fun technique

YWS
YWS
YWS
YWS


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Thu Sep 17, 2020 12:51 am
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W H Y D O U B L E Y O U E S S ! ! ! !

Hey there, @ArcticMonkey! Not sure if you will ever see this, but here is a review!

This is an awesome parody that you have created right here! Though the rhyming and rhythm were off in a few places, I think that this is an amazing and creative work that should definitely be sponsored by the Young Writers Society as its official theme song!

Have a nice [*insert time of day here*]!!!
-@Vil




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Mon Jun 08, 2020 6:33 pm
Em16 says...



Someone needs to make this a real song. Seriously. Weird Al should put this on his next album. It's gold.




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This is back to the front page? Excellent xD




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Writers, there’s a website to go on
I said writers, something to smile upon
You can join there, and I’m sure you’ll attend
You’re bound to find some great friends

It’s fun to be at the YWS
It’s fun to be at the YWS
It’s got everything to, make you smile
We know you’ll be there for quite a while

Its fun to be at the YWS
It’s fun to be at the YWS
You can post your work up
You can get good critique
You can learn some new, great technique

That part makes me fall on the ground laughing, It was hilarious. Creative person you are you are great.




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Fri Aug 14, 2015 7:34 am
Corncob says...



This is my new favorite theme song.




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I listened to YMCA while reading this to get the... thing... (tone? beat? tune? eh) right. :p As you said, some words don't seem natural, but I can't think of any alternatives for them. Either way, though, this is great. XD

YWS
It’s fun to be at the YWS
It’s fun to be at the YWS
Writers, writers, you may feel afraid
Writers, writers, you may need some aid

The second "it's fun to be at the YWS" shouldn't be here, as YMCA only says its version once at this part.

All-in-all, great parody! :D :p
Keep writing!
-Hatt

EDIT: *just realized that until yesterday, this hadn't been touched for, like, two years. o.o*




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This is an acceptable review, yeah? o.o I'm not trying to just grab points, is what I mean. >.>



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Jadefox says...



It would be fun to do a video contest/extravaganza in a forum and users submit music videos of themselves singing the song. Winner gets featured on the front page, perhaps?




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The fact that you are so many miles away from home and have absolutely no clue that this is on the front page makes me laugh even harder.

This. Is. Brilliant.




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Sat Aug 01, 2015 11:46 pm
Virgil says...



Beg, I mean Arctic, this is great xD




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Sat Aug 01, 2015 11:17 pm
speakerskat says...



Looking at this... Makes me wonder how good of a writer I really am ...

Good job




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That was hilarious.

On the spot; I actually sang it along with the song on youtube. This should be YWS's anthem. It'd be great. Someone could sing this song to the tune of the YMCA song. It could play in the background. Then there'd only be the lyrics on the front page so people can sing along to it. Haha, anyway...that was great.




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Hey, ArcticMonkey! OMGhamsterdweeb is here, reading your parody!

Oh my Gee, this is hilarious! I could not stop laughing! I've had other people in the library wonder what the hell I'm laughing, and I almost got kicked out!
This piece is just... wonderlicious! (I like making up words, as you can see.)
If you actually made a video for it, I would definetely watch it!
Well done, bro!

Swagilicious huggles from OMGhamsterdweeb 8)




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LMAO. Love this! Great job!




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I laughed so hard and my sister and I sang this out loud. Great job, ArcticMonkey!! :D I loved it!!

ROFL,
Wonder




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This made me laugh :) And made my day a lot better after reading this lol




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I can't even express how amazing this is




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This should be framed and put on all of our walls. Im going to print this, because it's simply spectacular




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CowLogic says...



I can't believe it. I like this one time yesterday and it goes up to 13 likes after 3 years. I'm like a celebrity.




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Totally





Cow, you're a troll, not a celebrity.

Although you might be a delusional troll.



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Wow thanks, Elo






Spotswood says...


i didn't realize how old it was until now haha. Most of the time, writers don't become famous until well after their works are published. In Fitzgerald's case, it was posthumous.



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I knew it was gonna happen eventually...nice job.




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Tue Aug 27, 2013 9:28 pm
CowLogic says...



Beautiful.




ArcticMonkey says...


omg I wrote this three years ago but I remember it more clearly! :o

Also why you stalking? :P



CowLogic says...


Wasn't stalking. Read your new poem, saw this in the box to the right.



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fair do's



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fair do's



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fair do's



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Thu Nov 18, 2010 11:06 am
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I love this so much LOOOOOOOOOOOOOL I keep on laughing while I was singing to your words. LOL yeah, there could have been better word choice, but so what?! :lol: nice idea, SACKHEAD! :lol:




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#800080 ">This is amazing. It made me laugh it really is fun to actually try and sing it. yes, I tried to sing to it ...awkward considering my friends were around, and stared like 'what are you singing?!' Yeah awkwardness is a winner. You are really creative I applaud you on this all around. I think you should do more this is fun and well..maybe see if other people would join in on it. See what others can come up with different songs. I do not know just thought it would be a interesting idea and thing to get other involved in.




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Mon Oct 04, 2010 3:12 am
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tam_ara wrote:It’s fun to be at the YWS I think this line should be: It's fun to have some YWS. Because you can't be at YWS...


That is only one of the many small problems with rhythms and stuff. I think the only way you can fix these is listen to the song again and again while following along with your words. I wish I could help, but I am pretty bad at lyrics.

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Ha! This is really cool! I congratulate you on your creativity. ; ) Nice work, this is fun and it made me laugh!




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Hey Tam,
Love the theme song we should definitely use it!!!!
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Wed Aug 25, 2010 7:47 pm
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Firstly, this is a great song!!!

Anywho down to some reviewing...

As people have said before me there are a few places that are out of rhythm due to either not having enough syllables or too many. As for those that have too many syllables, sometimes it's O.K. because it depends on how fast you end up saying the words. For example the first line of your second stanza "Writers, there's a website to go on." It sort of has one too many syllables, but it can work if the "to go" it sung quickly. Or you could change it to something like "Writer's there's a website that's fun" or something like that. If you are stuck on rhymes there are a few websites that can help.

Another bit of rhythm that's a little off is in the chorus. The first two lines are awesome. (It's really cool how the YWS/YMCA thing worked out!) The other two lines are a troublesome. The smile line is lacking a lot of syllables and as for the line after that it is mostly O.K., but just omit the "quite" to make it will flow nicely.

Overall, this is a fun piece and really cool for your first parody. I recommend, though, singing with the music and if there are any lines that trip you up rhythm-wise go back and look them over. Also it may help to find the lyrics to the original song just to see exact syllables. Good job! :)




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Tue Aug 24, 2010 8:43 pm
MissBennet says...



I really like this parody!! Good idea with the whole YMCA/ YWS but I agree that it needs to flow better (basically what Flemzo said). This is my first time properly on YWS (like you know) so ... WELL DONE ;D




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Tue Aug 24, 2010 7:04 pm
ArcticMonkey says...



Thanks for all the feedback, and whoop, it's featured!

@Felmzo I know that some things sound a bit off, I'm altering it so hopefully it will be better.


Everyone else, thanks so much! I hope this will be the YWS National Anthem, after a few modifications of course ;)

#FF4000 ">*Tamara* :)




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Tue Aug 24, 2010 6:15 pm
Kaywiia says...



This should be the YWS theme song!!!




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Tue Aug 24, 2010 2:31 pm
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xD
Tam, I love you!! We've got to make this our national anthem. Definately. It made me laugh the whole way through, and I may or may not have started singing once or twice...>.> Don't look at me like that dad! O.o
*Cough*
Anyways, other than what Flemmy said, I got nothing. This was wonderful :D




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Tue Aug 24, 2010 2:04 pm



OH MY GOSH BEST SONG EVER!!!!!!!!!! GO YWS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!




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I liked it..




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Haha. I love it. Good job, Tam.
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Mon Aug 23, 2010 11:50 pm
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Ahaha! That is just so hilarious! I loved it, Tam!

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Mon Aug 23, 2010 11:32 pm
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*claps*
I love this!
And to answer Razi's questions. This is how you would make a 'W', but you'd need two people. Unless there's a way to do it by yourself :? Haha
Anyways, I don't have much to critique, although I do agree with what Femzo said. But again, you stated you needed help with getting the lyrics right but unfortunately, I stink that that >.<
You did amazing anyways!
*like*

~Pink




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Mon Aug 23, 2010 10:09 pm
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Tam Tam:

*cracks knuckles and dusts off reviewing pen*

It's been forever since I've done a review, and lyrics are something I dig, and I especially love good parodies, so here we go.

As far as being a song praising YWS, spot on. Made your points clear, etc. etc. Excellent.

The only major problems are with the rhythm of the lyrics. Parodies are tough because you have to fit a pre-existing style and rhythm. There are a few places where you missed. When I try parodies (which aren't very often, but occasionally), I like to take the lyrics that are already there, and count out the syllables of the song. That way, I know how to pick my words to fit the rhythm and still have an effective parody.

That being said, this parody is a good start. Could use a little tweaking, but then again, what doesn't.

A good parody is, "Look! Here's a song, and here are words that I put to the song!"
A great parody is, "Look! Here's a song, and here are words that I put to the song, and it all fits!"

Hope that helped,
kf




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Mon Aug 23, 2010 9:12 pm
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Yeeeeah taffy!! You tell them!

Now lyrics are hard to review, because it's YOUR opinion and YOUR words. So I'll just express my opinion:
I completely agree! Young Writer's Society is awesome! Though I have to ask...how would you make the "W"?





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