dregymayfield

I agree with everyone on this. Some parts were good but I kept getting the idea that this was written by someone younger than 18 because it was just written ...

You did a wonderful job in describing things boys may say to get to third base..lol. Seriously, though, it was a bit cliche' but it wasn't all bad and yeah ...

I really liked the versus in this piece, however, I didn't really like the chorus and the bridge at the end. It threw me off into such a cliche' waterfall ...

The only thing that I thought was odd is that the title is called "If I left, Would you Right?". Now to me that doesn't make sense. Shouldn't it be ...

That was a bit exhausting and I really had to force myself to finish. There is a lot of unique wordplay here that unfortunately get's drowned out by the subject ...

The song was okay But I'm confused because you said this is for your wife and that she was pregnant. Yet, your name is Ashely. Now did you choose that ...

I'm not sure if this is from your personal diary or if it's just totally made up. I kind of liked it even though it was written in the form ...

I agree with crescent. Also, I believe you should go back and edit your format to look like this (I also corrected several words that were spelled incorrectly): If you ...

You want suggestions? I suggest you carefully look over your work before you submit it. This had a lot of errors in it. Like missing comma's and things of that ...

Hmm...It's not really that bad. I understand that the woman feels bad because, I suppose, she broke up with the guy. However, a break up isn't a terrible thing, unless ...

Not a bad first attempt at song writing. However, I strongly recommend you scan through it again because there are a few spelling mistakes. Also, did you intend for this ...

I knew how this song lyric was going to turn out before I even read it. Predictability can work well with some writers, but in this case, it didn't work ...

"I thought I could thrust you" When I read that I thought it was funny because it sounds sexual...I know you meant to say "I thought I could trust you". ...

This is a very well worded portrayal of how inspiration flows from a writer! It's almost as though you're defining that inexplicable rush of thoughts that burst from silence and ...

Wow, that was awesome It's very similar to the kind of stuff that I write about. When I saw the title I actually thought it was going to be some ...