I will hold onto you

I really liked the versus in this piece, however, I didn't really like the chorus and the bridge at the end. It threw me off into such a cliche' waterfall in which I'm drowing in lovie dovie unrealistic dialog. I just can't see anyone telling someone that is about to jump that "I'll hold on to you". The person doesn't need anyone to hold on to because they're holding on to the ledge or whatever and trying to decide whether to jump or not...lol. I don't know, I just felt the chorus was a bit dissappointing...sorry.

Hey ScratchMan! Thanks for the review! From my perspective, a bridge would be quicker than I knife, or maybe the character doesn't fancy stabbing them self as much as jumping off a bridge. The suicidal person is a girl, chorus, boy. There is a lot of hesitancy, and the point of jumping would (in her mind) prove....ummm....it's hard to say, but wanting to end your own life is usually because of the way other people treat you. Yes! Fast and the chorus slow.

Butterfinger wrote:Vrs1
As I’m looking down
From this high set bridge
There’s cars rushing by
And a rugged ridge
I could jump right now
And end my life
I could do it now
Quicker than a knife
So, in this first verse, we discover we are reading a song about a suicidal person... I'm not really sure jumping off a bridege would be quicker than a knife... I know it rhymes, but still...

Chorus:
But you say, I’ll hold-on-to-you
I won’t let you jump
I won’t let you die
You are my world
I cannot lie
I will hold-on-to-you
So the chorus is sung from a different POV, correct? Are there certain roles? Like, is the suicidal person a girl or a boy and is this guardian/savior person here a boy or girlfriend, if so?

Vrs2
My heart is pounding
In my chest
As I gaze down at
My eternal rest
I can do it now
With one small move
I’ll show them all
What I want to prove
See, now I know that this person isn't really suicidal because he or she is showing some hesitancy and uncertainty. Then again, they could be wondering whether or not a bridge is really the way to go. Also, what's there to prove? Don't kill yoursef to prove something to someone!

Chorus:
But you say, I’ll hold-on-to-you
I won’t let you jump
I won’t let you die
You are my world
I cannot lie
I will hold-on-to-you

Vrs 3
Then I’m standing on
The steady ground
Staring up at you
With out a sound
You’re really here
You truly care
As you run your fingers
Through my hair Yay ness! I like this verse!

Bridge:
And I say, I’ll hold-on-to-you
I will not jump
I’m not gonna die
You are my world
I cannot lie
So, I will hold-on-to-you.

I really like this piece a lot and I really wish that this website had some sort of recorder so then we could hear how it sounds. The lyrics are fantastic =]