Tammypoo! Here as requested (finally)!
As I told you earlier, lyrics aren't really my strong suite, so this might be a bit short and pointless. xD
First off, the song is pretty decent - the lyrics aren't bad, it flows well from what I can tell - it has all of the basics required for a good song.
The only thing I didn't really like about it was that the subject was a bit overused - people hiding their real selves for fame and fortune and the chance to be like everybody else; then it goes on to say that it's foolish (which it is, of course) and then about how they break down in the end from pressure, loneliness and all of that jazz. Granted, there's a bit more to it than that, but that's the basic gist of things. xD
It's not wrong or anything to write a song about an already widely-used topic, but if you're going to attempt it, you need to put a different spin on things. Use different phrases, different scenarios, etc... Something that will give it that unique twist that I love to see so much.
It's a song with potential, but it does need a bit of spiffing up.
(By the way, I'd love to hear this sung/with music.)
Loff!
~~Ishydung
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