Published April 16, 2011
If you don't know I love you
you will by the end of this song
and I know that I may not say it much
but I want you to know that
(Chorus)
I love you and always will
when I said forever and always
I meant that cause you are my forever and always
baby, don't you forget that
cause you make me feel like no one else does
You make me laugh when I know I'm totally about to cry
you make me happy when I'm really upset
no one else can do that but for some reason you have the gift
(back to chorus)
when I hug you
I get the butterflies
I feel like I'm about to fly high up in the sky
and when I say I love you I mean that baby
(back to chorus)
you know I love you NOW
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It's a bit mainstream, and unoriginal but it would make a good pop song. Maybe develop it further and make it more personal xXx
It's a bit cliche but makes for a good mainstream pop song. I would've liked some emotional depth.
I agree with crescent.
Also, I believe you should go back and edit your format to look like this (I also corrected several words that were spelled incorrectly):
If you don't know I love you
you will by the end of this song
and I know that I may not say it much
but I want you to know that
(Chorus)
I love you and always will
when I said forever and always
I meant that cause you are my forever and always
baby, don't you forget that
cause you make me feel like no one else does
You make me laugh when I know I'm totally about to cry
you make me happy when I'm really upset
no one else can do that but for some reason you have the gift
(back to chorus)
when I hug you
I get the butterflies
I feel like I'm about to fly high up in the sky
and when I say I love you I mean that baby
(back to chorus)
you know I love you NOW
Personally, I feel this song is a bit cliche, which is okay unless you want to be completely original. The title is a Taylor Swift song title and some of the lyrics seem very similar to other song lyrics by popular artists. I don't mean to be jerkish or anything. Short songs can be great. Short, sweet, and to the point. You most definitely have expressed the message you wanted to in this song, but you could expand upon this. Right now, it seems somewhat hollow, but songs always sound different with the melody. Keep on lyricking!
-Crescent
* 'cause (contraction for because)
**else (unless you speak a different English variation)
*to
Hi
this makes a good pop song if your not aiming for that maybe you should try to make it a bit deeper. Hard to tell where the rhymes are just by the format you've written it. Also it's a bit short! Just get a good tune to it and it'll be good