dragonfphoenix

Very interesting beginning. Just a few punctuation things you might want to check, like once you used a semi-colon instead of a comma. But minor things. Now, reading through this, ...

I felt the prologue, as a prologue draft, was descent, and outside of some minor grammar/spelling things rather okay. I'm not really familiar with your TSCV series, so don't know ...

Very interesting story! Had me wondering where the ability came from, and where you're going with this [please tell me this isn't all of it!]. I liked how you had ...

Very interesting story. I like how you separated the bullying between the emotional/psychological (Veronica) and physical (Samantha). Initial impression of this story is that it's going to be a sort ...

Very cool how your title for this poem can be applied to the environmental issues touched on. For some who hold the perspective that global warming is the biggest hoax ...

Very interesting symbols used. I like the heavy emphasis on decay, the rust and the gears roughly grinding together. Technical note: Second stanza "I’m to far gone to be saved ...

I can totally relate to having someone become a totally different person after a major event/crisis. It seems like the message hidden 'in between the lines' of this poem is ...

I have to concur with Liaya about this poem. It was amazing! I loved your metaphors, and felt all of them deeply despite how few words you used. Many words ...

Your shift in verb tense in the first paragraph kind of threw me a little. Try rereading it with the present tense in mind and you'll see what I mean. ...

This is really interesting. I like your style, and for once I'm very grateful not to have to tell someone to quit "telling" and "show" already. Not mad at you, ...

I finished reading this essay and felt like you didn't prove your thesis at all [last sentence stated]. Yes, the Internet has been a help, but how specifically has it ...

I felt like this was a story that had random words chopped out, or missing sentences completely. There needs to be a lot more description, and SLOW DOWN!!!! You're writing ...

That was hilarious! Your world reminded me a lot of Dr. Seuss in its absurdity (good absurdity! I

"Blinking his closed eyes open he faced down at a word saddle, weathered due to age and use." What does this mean? What's a "word saddle"? Or is it just ...

Well, that was long, and yet very sad, quality-wise. You need to choose one verb tense and stick with it. Switching back and forth between present and past tense is ...