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That is good, very good i like the way you expressed the emotion in the person who is mourning.

I...That is kind of creepy, I wont say i got the point, but i have a general idea, it was a very good short-poem-story.

That is pretty sad, but I have to agree with the last line. " After all, you never forget your first victim." I really agree with that line, but other ...

I like this poem, Adam i really do. It has a nice flow to it, keeps going leading to other things to lead to the last stanza i think it ...

Yaaa!

I thank you for your comment.

Good job Toby, i must say you have a thing with these little romantic embarrasing stories.

Finally toby! anyway back to subject its a good haiku.

you are a good writer 567ajt, very good. i wont deny it, but in some ways you are better than i and always will be. keep that pencil flowing

Im sorry about needing proof reading i was kind of in a rush to type this one. If you tell me what to fix i will fix it.

You are a good writer. I like your style, very well in my sense political. Keep writin man.

Ummm Whats up with all the question marks in your sentences?

that was actaully a pretty painful poem. but it was painful in a good way. there are lots of people like that living in a storm because they love someone. ...

very good and yet so sad. very sad.

that is a very good page i love it good description and nice everything else ya know? i love it its wonderful and taht picture want to keep the reader ...