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Muahahahahaha ! *shows no mercy* Nah, I'm kidding :wink: It was the year 1995 and the Inauguration of the new president was coming up. But my friends and I don't ...

Hey there. Here's the review: I t had been an easy night for Jack Hester. He had arrived at the house only to find that the kids were all already ...

*Waves* Heya, I'll be your reviewer today. Nitpicks ahead, be warned :wink: Barney looked up at the stunningly decorated Christmas tree. *dies* Please use another word to replace "stunningly". Please?

I second what Ballerina says about emotion, voice, and detail. Now, I shall nitpick! *squee!* June 15th 1812 – Three Days Until the War Will there be a continuation? "Two ...

This is very interesting. I like the way you've written this, dear; the layout is somewhat complicated, but logical and easy to follow. Search me. I don't like this, but ...

Hey there, I'll be your reviewer today *cheer* Allright, so let's get on with it: I knew it would kill me on the inside if he ever left me. But ...

I very much enjoyed reading that; well done ! There is nothing for me to be nitpicky about *le gasp* and there are no errors that stand out, or ... ...

Hey Tiff, First of all; I love the way that is written. Only one thing didn't read so nicely, and that was "Chubby child legs". The rest was very good, ...

Hey, you ^^ Interesting writing style. I like it. Here's the review: Repetition :In the first four sentences you use the word “school” five times, and the word “bathroom” four ...

Hey there, The review is in the attachment. PM me if there are any issues opening it, okay? It's probably fine, but some others have, in the past, had trouble ...

Hey, you. Welcome to the YWS ^^ About your work: It's short, as the other reviewers have mentioned *nods* and I'd advice you to post more than one paragraph at ...

Hey there ^^ First of all: interesting writing style!! It's nice. When I began reading I was mildly puzzled by it, but then I was drawn into the story and ...

First of all ... Welcome to the Young Writers Society !! :wink: On to the review: She lay there and heard the screaming of the girl next door. Nice opening ...

Hey, there Welcome to the Young Writers Society, m'dear ^^ About your poem: 1. Take out the smiley faces, dear, they don't add to the poem at all. Poems are ...

Haha ! This seriously had me cracking up a bunch of times :P Well done, hee hee :wink: Xxx