The Christmas Wish
Barney looked up at the stunningly decorated Christmas tree. He loved watching the fairy-lights flicker and the tinsel sparkle. At the top of the gigantic pine was a beautiful gold star the star that made small children’s eyes light up and filled hearts with joy and goodwill. The people around the tree were muttering their Christmas wishes.
Barney wished. He wished for happiness, but not for himself, for Sam.
He imagined Sam sat in his bedroom window looking out at the star making his Christmas wish and perhaps smiling the way Barney remembered. Barney knew this Christmas would not be a happy one for himself, he would maybe find a turkey bone on boxing day or possibly even a shelter to protect him from the frosty weather but he would not see the smiling faces of his family and to him that meant everything.
Barney's memories floated to him on the wind. It had been two months since he had jumped out of the car window in Halifax to chase the cat that had been mocking him and how he wished he hadn't. He often wondered what would have happened if the traffic lights had turned green a split second earlier, maybe he would not be here now living off of dustbin scraps and rain water.
A snow flake landed on his nose and brought his mind back to the present. Barney would have to find shelter soon or else sleep on the freezing street again. He got to his feet shaking the flakes off of his black coat then, leaving great paw prints in the snow he walked from the city center and onto main street.
There was not much snow on main, it had all been walked away by busy shoppers. Barney passed hundreds of people all laden with last minute shopping. The carrier bags rustling against their sides sounded like waves upon a rocky shore. One man tumbled from a shop supporting a large box, he stumbled blindly into Barney.
"Dumb dog!" The man yelled, kicking Barney into the crowd. Barney yelped. He found himself being trampled by a million people coming from all different directions, he howled in agony but they were all too busy with buying expensive things and yakking on mobiles to stop or care. The colorful lights that hung between the buildings added to his confusion.
He stumbled his way through the crowds then, as he felt like giving up and collapsing right there in the center of main, a voice clearer than any of the others called out so full of hope and joy that it broke through Barney's fear and filled his heart and memory.
A young boy dashed out across the street, his arms outstretched. Barney ran towards him and in a few seconds the boy had wrapped his arms around his beloved dog.
"I knew I'd find you," He whispered "I've missed you so much."
Barney wagged his tail. "I've missed you too Sam."
Really sweet story! I loved your use of decription and I thought this piece was very nicely written. On with the review 
I'd change 'and to him that' to 'that to him' to make the meaning more clear. 
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