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Wow..niiiiiiiiiiiiiiiice poem! I truly loved it! The title is good too! :D -Happy writing! ;) -De12

Thank you! Yeah, I like your version of that part of my poem better! ;) Those are all really good points, and, yes, I tend to do a lotta ellipses ...

Hi! Wow, thanks! Those are all really good suggestions and stuff!! Thanks for your honest thought on my poem!! :D:D:D -De12

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I didn't really read the poem but...cooooooool.....yada yada yada....bye....on account of the must have been cool. Hey I just say something in it that said:...''He took the apple and ate ...

Hi this was a really cool poem!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! (Sorry about all the exclaimation thingys hehehehe) Well, I really enjoyed this poem. My favorite

Nice work on this poem! I liked the way you wrote, ''The room echoed like an unused bookcase'' and ye.....the only thing that I didn't really like was the title...that's ...

Awesome job! -De12

Hi there! Really good poem here! The rhyming and flow was really nice and I liked it! :D -De12

Thanks! ;) And the full stops thing is a good point! :D (So thank-you also for that) Well, yeh...:D

Thank you! :)

Good job! :D

Thank-you! :D

No problem! :D

No problem! :D