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  • Short Story » General, General Re: It’s a Valet’s Life

    hey, d.f.b. here. i liked this story. it showed how a simple thing as a very very fine car can make people compete. i like the description of the car. ...

    Aug 26, 2010
  • Short Story » General, General Re: The Perception Of Love

    hey, d.f.b. here. welcome noob!!! hope you enjoy your stay at the yws! i loved how you wrote this. the comparisons and words you used to articulate your thoughts were ...

    Aug 26, 2010
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Mama, wake up!

    hey, d.f.b. here. loved this!! i think your view as a child was good. it was really sad when her mama died though. but the work here was good. very ...

    Aug 26, 2010
  • Short Story » General, General Re: #005 (The List) *edited*

    hey, d.f.b. here. i love this story. i like the unique way that you had the MC talk, as if she was explaining what he did back to him. i ...

    Aug 26, 2010
  • Short Story » General, General Re: No Title Yet

    hey,d.f.b. here. i liked this story. it was good. like d.d. said, you don't give us to much, but its a prologue, so yeah. the whole abuse and running away ...

    Aug 26, 2010
  • Short Story » General, General Re: afternoon musings

    hey, d.f.b. here. i totally and completely understand where your coming from with the whole random thoughts thing. i have those all the time. and i can relate on how ...

    Aug 26, 2010
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Taryn (Rated for language and content)

    hey, d.f.b. here. i liked this story. it was very nice. i liked how you made Taryn think that she still loved him. the last part where he threw her ...

    Aug 26, 2010
  • Short Story » General, General Re: The Brat's Package *edited*

    gotta few questions here. who was the brat? and what was the package? how big was it? where was she besides a dark alleyway? besides these, i thought it was ...

    Aug 26, 2010
  • Short Story » General, General Re: The Water is Wide

    d.f.b. here. this story made me cry. really, and i hardly ever cry. but this really got to me. i could imagine her feeling, the dream she had. this story ...

    Aug 26, 2010
  • Short Story » General, General Re: Words Will Always Hurt You

    hey, d.f.b. here! i loved this piece. it was short, but you made it really good to make up for that. i could imagine the characters room, his house, his ...

    Aug 26, 2010
  • Short Story » General, General Re: The Poisoned Glass

    hey, d.f.b. here. i liked this story, it was composed well, and i loved the concept. i just wished that you had described the imagery more. like what might grace ...

    Aug 26, 2010
  • Short Story » Fantasy, General Re: Possessing Maya edited- OLD

    hello, d.f.b. here. okay, first off, i read one of the earlier versions, and i must say that you sure did move a lot of things around. i like this ...

    Aug 26, 2010
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: Deleted

    hey kakagirl, its d.f.c., here to review! i did notice some little grammar mistakes, but its still a good story. you should try to portray how Serena felt deep inside, ...

    Aug 25, 2010
  • Short Story » Romantic, General Re: I love you

    hey ilovemyboys, i thought this story was absolutely wonderful in every way. well, except for the repetitive 'the way', i loved, loved, loved it!! i could seriously put my self ...

    Aug 25, 2010
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: finish me off

    i liked it. i have dark times too, well actually, im always like that..... it expressed how you felt very well. now, i dont know if your supposed to adress ...

    Aug 22, 2010


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