cristoffergarcia

this is a great poem. Short and sweet lines have so much substance in them. It is short, but I can really sit and decipher a lot of meaning in ...

Okay, is this how you normally write? Your style of writing seems dated. I would suggest making it sound more modern unless you were writing in this style for the ...

Its nice ,I liked it, does not have to be long or explain much.If you ever felt you never would really be free even if you thought you were. you ...

I liked that you used crustaceans as your characters for the story.I'm going to come up with many theories trying to figure out how deep this writing can go.One line ...

I realized quickly that you used yourself way too much that put me off really quick.Try adding you or he or she helps making people relate to it. expand on ...

I'm not sure how to feel about this poem.I like your format and grammar is good. You maybe could have made it longer or shorter it reads to much like ...

Again,OMG I won't rant. When tackling a simple concept like music. Please Be more descriptive or you will end up sounding like your narrating a product for a commercial this ...

It's cool people use poetry to release their pain but But here it looks like you used poetry to talk about your pain.That is a huge poetry mistake it will ...

Liked it except "My body stays cold:warm my frozen hands". Didn't really need that line after all the great imagery sounded a bit cliche. The last two lines sounded like ...

Yeah nice,Like how you used a concept of ying and yang.Now here are some suggestions so you can make your poem GREAT.You could describe more "For every lonely child there ...

Would like to know more about what your saying with this poem ,like how you say "the mountains cleave the light- But I find ending the poem with a sun ...

Your poem title "to wax poetic" unfortunately makes no sense. In this poem using the imagery,please don't rush it and do alot more imagery after. it leaves the reader with ...

Nice like your concept on memories and nostalgic wishing. You really find inspiration in simple things.I also read how you referenced childhood to make it more relatable Please remove "I" ...