Hello!
You know, there's always some sort of connotation with the word "crustaceans" that gives it a certain emotion just to hear that word. Maybe that's me. Anyway, I think the poem captured that feeling very well. It's similar to the feeling I get when I go into a grocery store, even if I don't walk by the meat/fish counter.
Anyway, that doesn't matter.
A few technical things:
as the actions they insight.
You probably mean "incite" here.
(incite (verb): encourage or stir up
insight:(noun): a deep understanding of a person or thing.)
and the blankets will be lay out,
Tenses! You probably mean laid rather than lay.
its dark inside the pot.
its is like when you say "the dog was licking its fur"
Here you're using it as "it is," so you have to put an apostrophe: it's.
Though it may be sunny upon the guests
This isn't a typo so much as word choice. If you're doing a really formal or old-style poem, then it's good to use "upon." But unless it's formal or old-style, I think you should just say "on." Also, the phrasing here is rather weird. I suggest shortening the line to "Though it's sunny,// it's dark inside the pot." Because is the blanket thing really necessary? I think it just clutters things up.
Other than that, I like the story and the sentiments of this poem. I like the details. Just make sure that you're not putting too much; make sure it all flows; make sure your grammar etc. is correct; and after all that is done, I think you'll be good.
Great job, keep writing!
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