craftywriter

Honestly Zib I can only do my own charecters personatily. It's one of my writer flaws.

I love stories that take classic stories and turn the bad guy good! I think this is a cute and really good. Everybody else covered the grammer and things so.... ...

Thanks for the opions guys! I understand what your saying and I'll try to fix it. I didn't describe the forest much because this is the only time in the ...

I love Warrior Fanoff's! Yours is a great one.

i really like your story. When they approach the kit, however, is where it gets foggy. Why do they think she is redpaw? How did she get into camp? Could ...

i really like where your going with this story. i think you should put in some more details about the setting and more about Yellowfoot. Also maybe you should put ...

I think you should DEFINITLEY keep going! And please make Nessie a strong charecter that's one of the things i didn't like about the twilight saga. How weak Bella was.

I'm not apart of the twilight fan craze but I gotta admit i love your totally unperdictable version!!! Keep going!!!

Definitley a good first piece. You probaly have had enough banter with the appreviatons but their right!! The same people advised me to and it helped. Alot. Please come out ...

Thanks for your opions guys! I really appreciate it. The poem was oringinally longer and "meatier" but I lost the paper it was on :(! I will definitley try your ...