"Yellowfoot, get your pelt out here!"
It wasn't a voice Yellowfoot knew. Heaving herself up,the aging cat shook out her coat.
"Our new leader, no doubt,"she murmured. "Let's test his measure."
She climbed stiffly down the slope, ruminating, "I should ask him for a den on the ground."
In the hollow, the pitiful remnant of RainClan huddled around a strange cat.
Not large, he still had a commanding presence. His pelt was a blur of white and gray and,
curiously, his paws were dusted by black spots.
"Are you our new leader?" she asked, never having been a cat to waste words.
He turned to face her, green eyes wide. A new warrior. "Only if you're unwilling or unfit to hold the post," he said.
Curious. "What say you?" Yellowfoot asked the assembled Clan.
Every cat but the stranger looked away. As I thought, she snarled silently. "Let's put it to the vote.
All in favor of electing this cat as leader..."
Three tails went up.
"Littlestar! Littlestar!" the Clan yowled.
"No," said the new cat. "No, I won't have it." The cheering gave way to shocked silence.
"I'm one of you now. I expect to be treated as a warrior of RainClan."
The old deputy's estimation of him went up a notch.
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So I like it A LOT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
I feel like it could've been longer. You could make it longer. Plz make it longer.
Other wise I <3 it !!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
Grammar!!!!!!
Wow grammar rocked.
Other
"the old deputys estimation of him went up a notch."
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-Nyanya
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As a matter of fact, I've been letting this story collect dust. I'll do my best to
polish this up and add more.
i really like where your going with this story. i think you should put in some more details about the setting and more about Yellowfoot. Also maybe you should put
Leader:
Deputy:
You know stuff like that. Keep writing warriors!
Hi Stori
I like this story and reading this has made me want to read the books that your story is based on. Is it the Warrior Cats?
Anyway, on with the review.
I didn't see anything wrong with it so I have no nit-picks, so well done you.
Other than saying that this is a brilliant beginning of a story I have nothing else to say apart from can you pm me you post more?
Thanks
midnightread
I love the warrior series! It's really funny that I was gonna write a story about RainClan!!! LOL
!! I think you need more setting. Where are they? Describe Yellowfoot walking down the path thinking about the new leader. Is it in the morning? Can he/she see the dew on the moss and remember times when he/she was a kit? Overall great job! PM me when you have the next chapter! 
