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I think everyone else has it covered. Umm... well, I like it, but its kind of repetitive. Not the poem, I know that was intentinal. The idea. Do something little ...

... ... ... ... Wow! Nice. I don't really think I can help you with thins one. Sorry. I like it. *You don't have to answer this question* Are you ...

Yeah, it went by [i]really[i] fast. Detail, detail, detail! Don't forget. Oh... one more thing. DETAIL!!!!!

What's with all the old romantic movies? And "diamonds are a girl's best friend"? Well, as a story... it passes.

Sorry for the confusion. I think I cleared it up.

Yeah... the end of the world. I didn't really care. Description. Or make the story longer, to make the reader care.

Really, really rushed. Emotion and detail could spread that out to the lenght of say... a page. You never know. I like how their not really named. Their just... there. ...

Wow, not you're typical love song. Not a broken heart. A waiting heart.

Sorry, I'm used to story formats. Thanks for the feedback, though. ;)

I really like it. Interesting. Do you think you could put it in a poem format, though?

Deception, broken heart, or a whim? Why? Never mind.

Was it written on a whim? Or for a purpose? Say, broken heart? Or back stabbing friends? Or is it open for interpretation? Sorry if its personal. You are in ...

Yeah, spaces after all of your commas (, ) and periods (. ). Was it betrayed trust? Or a broken heart? Or was it open for interpretation? Or was it ...

Yeah, some typos, and unfinished thoughts. the idea is fine, but work on the details.

I liked it, but, yeah, everyone else has already covered it.