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Re: Me
hey well done for sharing this poem. From the sounds of it, it means a lot to you. It's exactly what I tried to write down on paper when I ...
Nov 10, 2007 -
Re: Lady in a black dress
I really like this, especially the second verse.
Nov 10, 2007 -
Re: Bright
I really like this, although the first two lines are annoying me. Personally I think that the second line just sounds cheesy, and if you change this it would be ...
Mar 14, 2007 -
Re: Suffering
This poem really caught my eye. I really like its simplicity and straight talk. Well Done!
Mar 14, 2007 -
Re: Not Everyone
I don't know what else to call it...any ideas?
Dec 26, 2006 -
Re: The War You Have Found
I know this isn't my best poem, and I do think it needs some work. It was set as an English homework and in a way some of it was ...
Nov 12, 2006 -
Re: The Stars
I think it was just a little thing that I wrote. I didn't much think about what it meant. I think I was just trying to say that you can't ...
Nov 12, 2006 -
Re: My very short simple story
i like it. i would like it better if the end and p.s they lived happily ever after wern't they because they sort of through you off at the end. ...
Oct 14, 2006 -
Re: Love is...
I like this. The only thing i would say would be to make it into maybe 2 or 3 paragraphs so the reader doesn't find it to much. Keep writing, ...
Oct 14, 2006 -
Re: Writers
When I first wrote this poem, it wasn't actually about writers. The second verse went like this: We love violence, war but not prose, So we could live in a ...
Apr 13, 2006 -
Re: Deep Within
I've changed the second verse, but i still don't think it's quite right. What do you think?
Apr 11, 2006 -
Re: Waiting.
I love this poem! I especially like the first and second verse's! Well Done!
Apr 10, 2006 -
Re: Tsunami: Black Eyes
Thank you. I have changed a few things, but I'm not sure what to use instead of "I". Also, I was wandering if I should try to expand the story ...
Apr 10, 2006 -
Re: Can't
To be honest with you, i did have, but at the time when i was writing, i was in a sleeping bag in the middle of the night camping in ...
Apr 8, 2006 -
Re: Can't
i have written music to go with it, so i have to use slang so it goes with the music
Apr 8, 2006
