I agree it is good, but the second stanza is still a little 'off beat'. My suggestion, instead of, in the second line of the second stanza, 'pierces and pcratch my mind', is: 'they pierce and scratch my mind'
So: Words and Phrases cut me deep,
They pierce and scratch my mind,
Also, it may help make the entire poem run more smoothly, and together if the second stanza incorporated the same rhyme pattern as the first and second stanzas (abcb).
Good Job.
Points: 890
Reviews: 126
Donate