captain.classy

Haha, this is so cute! The only nit-pick I have is that towards the end, you use 'why' way too much. It throws off the flow, made me go back ...

Shouldn't you say in the beginning "how small the watermelon seed is right now?" Because you don't plant a baby watermelon and it grown into a big watermelon. I really ...

I like this, but I feel like you need to expand on each thing you like. With this as a base, you can make a really meaningful story! Take this ...

So this poem... everything in it can be explained by once sentence, and that sentence is in your title. Were is the story? Where is the meaning? What am I ...

You have some mistakes in here. I would suggest reading your story out loud, it really helps. You are so used to your own words that you can't pick out ...

Hey girl! Classy here. Only found two things! I drunkenly crossed the lawn, stopping a few times to regain some mentality and, well balance. -comma after 'well', also. “You can’t ...

Hiya! You should definitely read Evi's link. You have some issues with dialogue punctuation and must fix it. I will try and point out some issues for you, but these ...

Okay, it's meee! haha I usually don't like it when poetry goes like Blue... Red... Black... I find it annoying, but here, you put so many other words and descriptions ...

I'm sorry to say that I found this a little... pointless? I mean, if it was published on pages whith little hand drawn pictures on it, then it'd be cute. ...

Goodness Aqua! I think you belong in poetry; this really moved me. The music doesn’t sound so sweet when nobody is playing; I can’t sing the words right, I don't ...

My voice sounded loud in the quiet night, piercing it as if tiny needles were popping balloons. I think this sentence would flow better if you said: "My voice sounded ...

“Trust me… You will be fine. But you have to let go” he yelled over the resilient wind. There needs to be a comma after 'go'. “Let go… I promise ...

I definitely find this intriguing. I think you do have something here, and I strongly urge you to continue. Mostly because leaving me with this is not leaving me with ...

She had never seen herself in a mirror before, but the boots her opposite wore gave the fact away. This really confused me. I had to go back and read ...

I don't feel like this is a poem. I feel like this is a diary rant, something some one would write about heartbreak in solitude. For it to be more ...