bubblewrapped

I've said it before and I'll say it again. You need more subtlety in your work. Instead of attacking a subject head on you need to actually think about what ...

I have to say that I agree as well. Laughter is more than a sum of its parts, if you know what I mean. What's missing, I think, is subtlety. ...

I love this poem- there are soem great images in there. I traveled down the interstellar highway. I wanted to see you on the other side. You with hips like ...

Gripping is right. I almost feel too afraid to make suggestions here, but there are a couple of things that I felt need to be adjusted... children die, c'est la ...

I really enjoyed this poem. Glad to see you're posting more Firestarter - oh, and congrats on becoming member of the month ;)! Now, to the poem...I dont really think ...

Is this finished? It could be just me but it seems to stop rather abruptly... Greed is a goblin, That washes over us, Leading us away from honesty And hard ...

Well, coming after that post by Incandescence I suppose anything I say is going to look kindly by comparison, lol. Just remember this is only my opinion! Anyway. This has ...

I dont think I can say anything at all about this poem. It left me speechless. I love it, particularly the first stanza, although I kinda agree with Nate about ...

Soft rose petals float down in the wind, spiralling, twirling, swirling in the air I have to say I think thats my favourite line lol. Very vivid imagery, and an ...

I agree with Galatea about those little bits, but otherwise its an awesome poem. I particularly like the way that you didnt overdramatize the blood- I should say you deliberately ...

I loved that poem. Really, thoroughly loved and adored it. Its brilliant. It captures precisely what I feel quite often, not to mention it was very funny, what with rutabagas ...

Interesting, definitely a lot of vivid imagery in this one. I cant say I liked it as much as I did your previous work, but that could just be because ...

LOL that was quite good actually. Initially I wasnt sure but after several readings...I'm not sure exactly what you mean, since I live in a different country and everything, but ...

OMG. [points at marzipan] What they said. And then some. This is AWESOME. to gouge this grainy wind which walks so free, (proving life's existence with no intermittance) would be ...

Beautiful. Truly beautiful. Days and nights and eons ago the sun ran away from the moon. he went to parts unknown--the universe he said, was his oyster. Love this section. ...