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I hated him at first. Artemis Fowl, I mean, although I guess I should say Colfer. The writing style put me off and for a while I didnt bother reading ...

OK, here's the first part. Yes, there are two parts. Why? Because it's a long story and I talk too much in crits sometimes. Deal with it :lol: Mark sat ...

When I saw her, there was no question to it; I absolutely had to talk to her. Several things played a factor in this: she was the most beautiful creature ...

Hey Adam! I remember reading something similar by you before, I gave me an odd feeling of deja vu o-O Anyways, here's my crit: June 16, 2356 It’s been so ...

A beautiful poem; deceptively simple, I think. Your line breaks could use a little bit of work, as could your punctuation and I would not capitalize every line but otherwise ...

Weirdly enough, it is nearly 2:19am on Friday Morning as I write this o_o Anyway. I second what BFG said - I think this is my favourite poem of yours ...

For a fourteen-year-old...maybe. I have to agree with Rei, though - questions do not work for me in poetry unless they're unusual or necessary in some way. And...well....you have some ...

I enjoyed it - how could I not? - but for some reason I find myself feeling that it promised so much and failed to deliver. You are very good ...

I think Perforated Hearts has covered most of the major points, so I'll just give you an overview of what I think. IMHO you're focusing to much on the wrong ...

Your wish is my command, Sinister Jigster! Overall, my reaction was (sorry) one of anticlimax. Maybe it’s me, but I read so many things where the person gets sucked into ...

Yo Fabien! You asked for it, so here it is... Overall, I'm left feeling kinda flat here. The piece has promise, and I like the "provocative" (to steal Chevy's word) ...

Hi wildlove100%, Welcome to YWS! Hope you're enjoying the site so far :) Here's my take on your poem - keep in mind that this is just my opinion, but ...

Well, you asked for it, so here it is. Overall, this poem didnt really work for me. I'll tell you why: 1. Telling vs. Showing. Yes, this saying is getting ...

I gotta go soon, so I'll have to make this quick. I love the edits -- particularly the addition to the scene with Lucifer. Perhaps you could add in there, ...

Haha, Jiggy, I love you! ... Well, OK, maybe not love, exactly, but this really did make me laugh XD First, the specifics: One, a tall ascetic looking fellow, glared ...