bubblewrapped

No need for a preface, I think the poem stands on its own quite well. I really liked this piece. You have a nice sense of rhythm and the rhyming ...

I'm going to be blunt and say that this poem wasnt very good. At all. You have a great premise. Can we ever truly connect with others? How can we ...

Hmm. Well, other critiquers have pointed out most of the things that bugged me, but I just have to reiterate (ironically) that the repetition didnt do anything for me. I ...

I second (third?) Clau and cadmium. For a first attempt at free verse this works nicely and it's great to see a love poem that doesnt rhyme for a change. ...

Huh. Well, perhaps because I dont know Hypocrit but most of this was lost on me. It sounded (in my mind) very rant-ish and it was difficult to get the ...

To be honest, although this was fairly well done – at least so far as rhyme and rhythm are concerned – it didn’t really do much for me. Far too ...

:smt049 :smt041 :smt049 In case you havent guessed, I really love this piece. I heard it won the competition so I figured I'd check it out - boy am I ...

I think this poem gave me nightmares last night LMAO. Aside from that though, as a poem it's very well done, and I love the subject. Very clever :D Cheers, ...

I have to say I agree - this is far too prosaic to really work as a piece of poetry. I know what bullying is like, but even I dont ...

I loved this. At first I didnt understand the connection between Sarah and her father and the toys, so you might want to make that a bit clearer. I would ...

Hi Jiggy! You asked for it, and so here it is. Buildings, tall and dark, towered above him; graphitized messages screamed at him, glowing in the night . Sam’s breath ...

Took me about 7-8 hours all told. I have to say it's the best in the series - I loved it in all but one thing, which I knew was ...

Actually I think it's "petals". Other than that, it's nice but I am left wondering why it was written, if you see what I mean. What is it about? What ...

Wow! You're good! (I probably shouldnt sound so surprised, but it's always nice to find a fantasy writer with talent ;)) I especially like the dialogue. Very realistic. I definitely ...

An interesting poem and a unique approach. Some things I think could be improved... I don't like that look in your eyes. Of course it's the only look I've seen ...